RedCollarBlackCollar said:
With only one critique, I think it's a bit rash/quick to just throw it away.
I obviously can't just tell you to be more confident in your work, but I really do think you're being too hard on yourself here. It's a pretty good start if anything, and the fact that you were willing to ask for feedback was a good first step.
If you're willing to stick with the work, I'd like to try and help you out with this piece as best I can with whatever feedback.
It's a good indication that I shouldn't be attempting a picture like this when I'm told "Absolutely everything about the anatomy is wrong and you sketch like shit." Maybe I'll revisit this idea eventually, but it's clear I shouldn't be trying it now.
Yuu-chan said:
It's a good indication that I shouldn't be attempting a picture like this when I'm told "Absolutely everything about the anatomy is wrong and you sketch like shit." Maybe I'll revisit this idea eventually, but it's clear I shouldn't be trying it now.
...by one person?
I think that's again, kind of rash, but hey, you do you. I aint gonna pressure/push ya to stick with it if you'd prefer to hold off on it for now.
As I said before though, if you do change your mind, I'll still be here.
The stash link isn't working. Do you have to be logged in on DeviantArt to view it? That aside...
If you hate drawing and asking for critique so much, maybe you should stop drawing for us, start drawing for yourself.

Fuck realism. Fuck lines, messy sketches, only being able to draw one eye right, and especially, wholeheartedly, fuck feeling shitty about your art. Stop drawing to upload stuff. Start drawing because hey, you can still draw butts and flowers and aren't those the best? As smutty and detailed and sketchy as you happen to feel like. Just because you can, just because you like the feel of pencil on paper.

It's less about loving your art and more about loving yourself. Please. Love what you do, for you. Not for us.
Friye said:
The stash link isn't working. Do you have to be logged in on DeviantArt to view it?
I took the pic down.
Friye said:
The stash link isn't working. Do you have to be logged in on DeviantArt to view it? That aside...
If you hate drawing and asking for critique so much, maybe you should stop drawing for us, start drawing for yourself.

Fuck realism. Fuck lines, messy sketches, only being able to draw one eye right, and especially, wholeheartedly, fuck feeling shitty about your art. Stop drawing to upload stuff. Start drawing because hey, you can still draw butts and flowers and aren't those the best? As smutty and detailed and sketchy as you happen to feel like. Just because you can, just because you like the feel of pencil on paper.

It's less about loving your art and more about loving yourself. Please. Love what you do, for you. Not for us.
Ya know what. I'm going to take this advice. c:
Thanks random moto person on the interwebz. *looks at noose* Not today old friend.
RedCollarBlackCollar said:
Uhhh...
I think my only main issue is how different the hair changes from beginning to end. I know that arguably, his hair falls down to signify the death, but they really seem like two different sets of hair... That and the hair sticking up on edge + eyes popping I'm not crazy about upon being choked. I get that it's somewhat cartoonish, but it just feels a bit detached from the animation/drawing style. meh

Other stuff's pretty solid though, like the coiling. Good job with that for sure.
Thanks for the feedback. Yeah I wanted to give him a wilting quality but I can see where it does look more like a metamorphosis.

I probably won't change the reaction from choking but if I do another animation I might expirment on a more subtle expression.
School will be ending mid May for me, and as I figure, I'll probably be slacking off quite a bit. So to at least get some ideas and feedback going before that time comes, any ideas or suggestions as for some more content you'd like to see from me?

I'm not looking for art requests in particular, but just wondering what I've done well with my art thus far that you guys would like to see more of.
RedCollarBlackCollar said:
School will be ending mid May for me, and as I figure, I'll probably be slacking off quite a bit. So to at least get some ideas and feedback going before that time comes, any ideas or suggestions as for some more content you'd like to see from me?

I'm not looking for art requests in particular, but just wondering what I've done well with my art thus far that you guys would like to see more of.
Zombie Walk and Kimonos is all I'd like to see. c:
someguy231 said:
Zombie Walk and Kimonos is all I'd like to see. c:
I'll add in heels and glasses..cause we both like that and I want to see how all those thing would look togather.
Happy trances! And I second the heels and glasses thing :P
Imasuky said:
I'll add in heels and glasses..cause we both like that and I want to see how all those thing would look togather.
And hardcore pornography! Lots and lots of hardcore pornography!!
Mezzberry said:
And hardcore pornography! Lots and lots of hardcore pornography!!
I second this. Also rather than give you internet points I'll give you Imasuky points!

They are worth even less!
Imasuky said:
I second this. Also rather than give you internet points I'll give you Imasuky points!

They are worth even less!
Are they worth a continuation? ;3
http://hypnohub.net/post/show/40449

spoiler

Mezzberry said:
And hardcore pornography! Lots and lots of hardcore pornography!!
Maaaaaaaybe <_______<

Friye said:
Imasuky said:
someguy231 said:
Zombie Walk and Kimonos is all I'd like to see. c:
I'll add in heels and glasses..cause we both like that and I want to see how all those thing would look togather.
Happy trances! And I second the heels and glasses thing :P
Haven't done any zombie walking, which I'll honestly admit, never really loved it. I kinda dislike subs that are mindless, which is why I give lotsa praise to works like Mezz's and comms like Solddate's. I do think that Karma's definitely made some great stuff outta ZW in particular, so I think he'd be better suited for that than I would...
Drew two of my OC's in kimono's for a more "serious" illustration a while back. Maybe could draw a comic of em for the Hub while they're still wearing em... Someday... meh.

Yeah, that sounds like something I really need to do. Trouble is, I make stuff that's more cute than sexy, so might not come out like the latter... But hey, I'm up for pushing myself to try and go outside my comfort zone! :0
spoiler

Dw, happy traces I always do.
Otherwise, my work would probably lack any sorta MC, and thus get pulled... >______>
RedCollarBlackCollar said:
Are they worth a continuation? ;3
http://hypnohub.net/post/show/40449

spoiler

Maaaaaaaybe <_______<

I'll add in heels and glasses..cause we both like that and I want to see how all those thing would look togather.
Happy trances! And I second the heels and glasses thing :PHaven't done any zombie walking, which I'll honestly admit, never really loved it. I kinda dislike subs that are mindless, which is why I give lotsa praise to works like Mezz's and comms like Solddate's. I do think that Karma's definitely made some great stuff outta ZW in particular, so I think he'd be better suited for that than I would...
Drew two of my OC's in kimono's for a more "serious" illustration a while back. Maybe could draw a comic of em for the Hub while they're still wearing em... Someday... meh.

Yeah, that sounds like something I really need to do. Trouble is, I make stuff that's more cute than sexy, so might not come out like the latter... But hey, I'm up for pushing myself to try and go outside my comfort zone! :0
spoiler

Dw, happy traces I always do.
Otherwise, my work would probably lack any sorta MC, and thus get pulled... >______>I'll try again, though I'm thinking of starting over from scratch.
Imasuky said:
I'll try again, though I'm thinking of starting over from scratch.
Aw, I really enjoyed that first chapter :c
But hey, you're the writer. I trust ya to do what's best!
RedCollarBlackCollar said:
Aw, I really enjoyed that first chapter :c
But hey, you're the writer. I trust ya to do what's best!
I just meant chapter to getting started over from the start. I had a little bit of it but I'm not feeling that. Chapter one will not be touched.
Imasuky said:
I just meant chapter to getting started over from the start. I had a little bit of it but I'm not feeling that. Chapter one will not be touched.
ohthankgoodness

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RedCollarBlackCollar said:
ohthankgoodness

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Pretty sure the sub would be wearing glasses. And hey Andra loves heels.
Imasuky said:
Pretty sure the sub would be wearing glasses. And hey Andra loves heels.
But would she get her sub to wear em both?
RedCollarBlackCollar said:
But would she get her sub to wear em both?
Yes
Imasuky said:
Yes
I'm down for that :3
The drawing bug has struck again, feedback wanted. Seriously, every time you look at it and don't provide feedback, God kills a kitten.

*Loli warning* Link
TheKinkyFinn said:
The drawing bug has struck again, feedback wanted. Seriously, every time you look at it and don't provide feedback, God kills a kitten.

*Loli warning* Link
Looks pretty solid man.
TheKinkyFinn said:
The drawing bug has struck again, feedback wanted. Seriously, every time you look at it and don't provide feedback, God kills a kitten.

*Loli warning* Link
Damn that's good!
TheKinkyFinn said:
The drawing bug has struck again, feedback wanted. Seriously, every time you look at it and don't provide feedback, God kills a kitten.

*Loli warning* Link
You've definitely got the looseness of the fabric down. It's a difficult pose, so perhaps it's best to give all three a bit different skincolour because the hand grasping the right thigh looked odd to me at first before I realised it belonged to the one in the middle.
I checked by laying upside down in front of my mirror, and the ears on the front character should be a bit higher on her head (so literally lower in the drawing). Like this maybe. I love the curled toes now that I've been able to zoom in a bit! Wonderful detail ^^
Friye said:
It's a difficult pose, so perhaps it's best to give all three a bit different skincolour because the hand grasping the right thigh looked odd to me at first before I realised it belonged to the one in the middle.
Yup. In fact I decided to show a bit of the other arm to clear up that confusion (not that it matters since it's colored).

I checked by laying upside down in front of my mirror, and the ears on the front character should be a bit higher on her head (so literally lower in the drawing).
While I appreciate the effort, I decided to keep the ears as is, I recall it makes characters look a bit more young. Nonetheless, thanks for pointing it out, I'll keep it in mind in the future.

I love the curled toes now that I've been able to zoom in a bit! Wonderful detail ^^
I'm glad you like it, I've frankly done very little studying up on feet, so it's pretty good to hear they're at least not attrocious.

Anyhoo, version 2, electric boogaloo. As before, feedback welcome, especially since I'm about as green as you can get in the coloring department. spoiler

*Loli warning* Link
It looks a lot better with colours! Not 100% intuitive where limbs go and that's a good thing, but not unintelligible (can I use that for art?) thanks to the clothing colours where they do go. And don't worry about the background, it looks great to me ^^ not distracting from the scene at all.

You might be right about that ear-thing. Never really noticed that before :o
Here's the first couple pages to my comic. its only the first 7 to kind set the mood. lemme know how I can improve further pages.

http://imgur.com/a/r6StW
Another for the pile, opinions wanted. (As before, loli warning, though this one should be "safe")
NakAtNight said:
Here's the first couple pages to my comic. its only the first 7 to kind set the mood. lemme know how I can improve further pages.

http://imgur.com/a/r6StW
NakAtNight said:
Here's the first couple pages to my comic. its only the first 7 to kind set the mood. lemme know how I can improve further pages.

http://imgur.com/a/r6StW
Looks very interesting. just enough int at the story that I do wonder what it's about.