STORY THREAD
I'm making this thread based on a convo I had in chat and the fact my gf posted a story in the forums.

Rather then then everyone making a separate thread for every stories.

So without further adue...
This thread is for people to post links to stories they have written or even the stories themselves if you want and even fought drafts are ok.

People can comments on works and make suggestion and such.
I'm not a writer but I do like reading.

I think if people are posting their stories you ought to put a small description so the reader knows what theyre getting into, I dont want to read something that seems enjoyable to me at first then suddenly full of drinking urine and diapers and what not, no offense to those who like those things, just not my taste. Maybe even maybe some basic tags like malesub, femdom and what not. Since just a link isnt gonna do much for attracting readers.

I hope people use this thread more though.
Diaper_queen said:
http://pastebin.com/FDYNQujy my awesome new story everyone
I don't think you understand how much I love stories that involve texting or instant messaging as a means of controlling someone, love it.

Besides the typo here and there it was a good read. I always prefer if more focus is put on the induction and programming of the subject and playing around with them a little rather than getting "right to buisness." For example making the subject feel or think something every time they see a trigger and the confusion/brainwashing that happens during that experience. I never liked it when the narration demeans the character and calls them derogatory terms but that's just a personal thing, I'm sure other people actually prefer that.

I'd love to see more instant messaging based stories in the future though. Maybe making a mock chat log between a hypnotist and an unexpecting subject, that is the greatest kind of hypno :Q_____
Diaper_queen said:
http://pastebin.com/FDYNQujy my awesome new story everyone
nice story, you didn't hold back at all i see
http://hypnohub.net/forum/show/5693

The lamia's circle

Romantic hypnosis, revolving around a human female and a lamia she is hunting, unaware te woman has been stalking her for years...

Contains Yuri, futa, oviposition (placing eggs Into another), lamia (duh), sexy times

http://hypnohub.net/forum/show/3245

M.O.T.H.E.R

A solider is captured by a race of cyborg women and is raped and indoctrinated into their ranks.

Contains loli, tech control, tentacles, sexy times.
http://fav.me/d77betz

A slice-of-life story involving a college girl who is addicted to her Kirlia's hypnosis.
A micro-story entitled "One Act of Bravery". 500 words

"No… please!" the blonde-haired woman cowered in the corner of the apartment, paralyzed with fear by the intruder.

The intruder simply smiled, advancing on the woman, casting a long shadow behind it as it moved into the apartment.

"I'll do anything! I'll give you anything! Just don't come any closer!"

Now the intruder frowned, leaping towards the woman, seizing her by the shoulders, and raising her into the air. The woman closed her eyes in fear.

"One thing you'll learn about my kind," the intruder said. "You can't lie to us. Human minds are so painfully transparent. Look at me when I'm speaking to you!"

The woman opened her eyes, taking in the full visage of the intruder. At first, she only seemed to be another woman, tall, brown-haired, with pale skin. It was only in the sharp points of enamel sliding out of her wine-dark lips and in her fierce red eyes that betrayed her kind.

"You won't "give me anything," the Vampire said. "You're playing the soft, helpless damsel in distress. Not that it's too hard for you to do that," she sneered as the woman sniffled. "But you are doing this deliberately, to hinder our efforts to drink the blood of that Butch you live with."

"Don't talk about Joanne like that!" the woman yelled. "She's a selfless woman, always working to protect people!"

"She's a lesbian stereotype," the Vampire said. "A woman taking a stereotypically masculine job to show off how different she is. Of course, you're not much different. You've always been looking for your Prince, or, thanks to a trick of nature, your Princess. Happy Butch and Femme lesbians."

"Well, Joanne won't avoid us for long. She'll find her SWAT unit is in no position to help her stop us."

"She'll protect people from the likes of you until she dies," the woman said, choking back sobs.

"Which is why you decided to sacrifice yourself? Offer your pretty neck up to the big, bad vampire? Keep her busy long enough to let Joanne get away?"

The woman began sobbing. "Shh, shh…" the vampire soothed. "You've been a coward all your life; afraid that your own weakness would let someone take advantage of you. You're terrified now. I see them in your head; all the horror-stories about vampires reducing humans to mere meat-puppets, walking blood-banks to be harvested until they perish."

"Well, I would have done just that, but a woman as selfless as you should be rewarded. I'll give you two rewards: eternal life and a chance to see Joanne again, so that she can thank you."

The vampire dropped her prey, then stared deep into her eyes, her potency infesting the human, forcing her to kneel and offer her neck.

The woman felt the vampire's lips, then her teeth, then a dark ecstasy that made its bid for control of her mind.

Her last old thought, and her first new thought, were one in the same: she just wanted to see Joanne again.
Ogodei-Khan said:
*snip*
So, anyone up for a VtM session?
BML-20XX said:
http://fav.me/d77betz

A slice-of-life story involving a college girl who is addicted to her Kirlia's hypnosis.
I very much liked this one, light hearted and sweet yet still really entertaining. Its nice that not all stories have to end in something hardcore or uber explicit.
BML-20XX said:
http://fav.me/d77betz

A slice-of-life story involving a college girl who is addicted to her Kirlia's hypnosis.
This was so cute. I really like lighthearted stories like this. They make me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.

Totally agreed with Zko on this one.

After staying up a little late, I wrote this up in the setting of a friendly Steam chat (because I love Steam): http://pastebin.com/ewhkPf4U

I think I may have put a few too many references in there.
Dreamshade said:
This was so cute. I really like lighthearted stories like this. They make me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.

Totally agreed with Zko on this one.

After staying up a little late, I wrote this up in the setting of a friendly Steam chat (because I love Steam): http://pastebin.com/ewhkPf4U

I think I may have put a few too many references in there.
OH god, hypno stories based around chat logs, I cant understand why I crave these so much, it's too much for me I love it. Though in terms of criticism I would have the hypnotist play with the subject a little more rather than just buy games and be done with it, just to confirm their new dominant status. Or even put up some post triggers, like when you beat a boss in Binding of Issac you will "x." You have videogames as a subject (sort of) so might as well use them~
And I never liked the word affirmative unless you're in the military but that's just my personal niche taste.

Makes me want to write more short stories based around the concept of hypnotized via IM and email rather than draw skypenotized.
Zko said:
I very much liked this one, light hearted and sweet yet still really entertaining. Its nice that not all stories have to end in something hardcore or uber explicit.
Dreamshade said:
This was so cute. I really like lighthearted stories like this. They make me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.

Totally agreed with Zko on this one.
Yay! People liked my story!
Thank you.
Zko said:
OH god, hypno stories based around chat logs, I cant understand why I crave these so much, it's too much for me I love it. Though in terms of criticism I would have the hypnotist play with the subject a little more rather than just buy games and be done with it, just to confirm their new dominant status. Or even put up some post triggers, like when you beat a boss in Binding of Issac you will "x." You have videogames as a subject (sort of) so might as well use them~
And I never liked the word affirmative unless you're in the military but that's just my personal niche taste.

Makes me want to write more short stories based around the concept of hypnotized via IM and email rather than draw skypenotized.
Thanks for the criticism. :D I really liked writing it; chat logs really feel like a completely different write to conventional stories. I felt more like the characters were writing themselves once I got started. :3

I was thinking of continuing with these two since I like them, so I went a bit light for this one (also it was 5 AM and I decided to go to sleep). I felt like hearts was still a bit skeptical of Vodka's actual state since it was accidental, so they didn't take full advantage of it this time around. I tried to imply that with hearts going off to look up what to do.

I had a hard time thinking of words that meant Yes that weren't, um...yes. Spent about 5 minutes thinking on that one before I gave up. I didn't like it myself, since it felt a bit out of place with hearts's fairly lax chat and Vodka's otherwise formal but friendly chat.

I really like Skypenotized, in particular how the hypnotist messes with Crystal, especially the slip-up with the text. My // was based on the brackets your hypnotist has, but since you already did brackets, I just stole end-of-line comments from C. :3

//Compiler-senpai never notices me :C

BML-20XX said:
Yay! People liked my story!
Thank you.
It makes me wish I had a Kirlia. :3 I could use some stress relief.
Dreamshade said:
C
Dreamshade said:
Kirlia
Dreamshade said:
http://puu.sh/74vpr.swf
Who are you and why do you have such good taste?

Anyways I used to write a bunch of naughty things (CoC oldboii reppin) but have been trying to focus on drawing so I don't have anything recent to post. I might give another story a shot for funsies though, if we're sharing now~
I love these two.

http://pastebin.com/divQLm0F

I don't know whether I space the times out for consecutive messages very well. I generally try to keep it to about four per minute. Seems about right for chat, though I think I type faster than that myself.

Also, I realize I made a bit of an error. Chocolate Milk and Brimstone isn't a very good combo, as it kind of bugs out a bit and screws with how Brimstone works in a not entirely positive way. I guess hearts might not know that, though, so maybe it works out.

Criticism is greatly appreciated. <3

TakyonH said:
Who are you and why do you have such good taste?

Anyways I used to write a bunch of naughty things (CoC oldboii reppin) but have been trying to focus on drawing so I don't have anything recent to post. I might give another story a shot for funsies though, if we're sharing now~
I am the one beyond the boundary, Champ. #Shouldra
Dreamshade said:
*all dat*
I like it so far. For the messages I'd say wait a little longer (let a minute or two go on) when he seems to be waiting. The idea of her just staring blankly at the screen doesn't really offend me, and there were a few places when they're awake where whatever she's doing could probably go on a little longer. Otherwise there's not too much to critique here, I like these chatty things for seeing the creative suggestions and humor. Also the sexy. They do leave a lot to the imagination, especially without pictures, so I might have her saying more stuff without realizing it since that's more explicit. Also also the guy who did Shouldra was pretty cool, so once again solid taste mah boii.
Dreamshade said:
I love these two.

http://pastebin.com/divQLm0F
Aw yes, keep them coming. I can't help but feel skypenotized inspired you quite a bit with some of the lines in there, that or maybe I should deflate my assumptious ego.

I also agree with TakyonH's suggestions. And the idea of leaving things up to the imagination of the viewer is a great way to go. Also I like the idea of her not being aware of things very much, like how she seamlessly started doing the whole master thing was nice. I'd like to see more use of triggers making her say or do things without being aware of it~
Maybe even doing a group chat and having a third person get involved and programmed.
Zko said:
-snip-
I'll give you one guess as to what inspired me to write these in the first place. :P

I'm trying to work you guys' suggestions into the next one I'm writing. I'm a little tired right now, though, so it might be another day before I've got it in a state I like.
These keep getting longer. :P Word-wise, this one is almost twice as long as the first.

http://pastebin.com/0KbDm6R7

I ended up specifying the hypnotist as male, because I felt that it was better to be able to use the pronouns rather than making some of the sentences sound really awkwardly vague. This probably also makes it the first maledom story I've ever written. :P

Hope you like it. :)
Dreamshade said:
These keep getting longer. :P Word-wise, this one is almost twice as long as the first.

http://pastebin.com/0KbDm6R7
Very enjoyable, keep it up (☞゚∀゚)☞
http://pastebin.com/t3k3ZJg0

Finally started. Nothing lewd yet but if you don't see where I'm going with this I wouldn't trust you driving, that's for sure. Their ages are HIGH SCHOOL and will remain HIGH SCHOOL so imagine to your liking. I may try to draw some shit if I have time in the next week or so.
TakyonH said:
http://pastebin.com/t3k3ZJg0

Finally started. Nothing lewd yet but if you don't see where I'm going with this I wouldn't trust you driving, that's for sure. Their ages are HIGH SCHOOL and will remain HIGH SCHOOL so imagine to your liking. I may try to draw some shit if I have time in the next week or so.
Cute. :3

I like the names; I have a particular fondness for the name Erin. :P

More hypnocat!

I've been writing Log 4, which will mostly be with Shining Finger. Been rather busy/out of it due to events at school.
Dreamshade said:
Cute. :3

I like the names; I have a particular fondness for the name Erin. :P

More hypnocat!

I've been writing Log 4, which will mostly be with Shining Finger. Been rather busy/out of it due to events at school.
To be 100% honest someone (you?) just rec'd Erin in the IRC and old Game Grumps videos probably put the guy's name in my head. At least they're spelled different. Wrote myself into a spot where I can do a lot of things though and I am way too picky about non-lewd options so I'm having a tough time moving on mine too. Hopefully I'll be home kinda early tonight and can put more up then.
TakyonH said:
To be 100% honest someone (you?) just rec'd Erin in the IRC and old Game Grumps videos probably put the guy's name in my head. At least they're spelled different. Wrote myself into a spot where I can do a lot of things though and I am way too picky about non-lewd options so I'm having a tough time moving on mine too. Hopefully I'll be home kinda early tonight and can put more up then.
I completely forgot that I suggested Erin. XD But yes, I have a special fondness for that name, which is kind of odd considering it's never been an important name in my life.
PART TWO
http://pastebin.com/HwC583T9

Since zko mentioned it earlier, tags would be femsub, maledom, pretty fuckin' vanilla my dudes. Starting to get much lewder, the "muh morality" will drop sooner rather than later and I can get into the really fun parts :3

Also pls let me know if you like it, don't like it, whatever. Suck it or bite it, either or, but I like to know if people are reading~

Also also if this gets removed from pastebin because I set it to public (horror and shame abound) let me know and I'll re-up it.

Also also also me when weebs spam music in the IRC ♪ヾ(⌐■_■)ノ
TakyonH said:
PART TWO
http://pastebin.com/HwC583T9
Hey just want to let you know that I like this. I would love to give some more in-depth criticism but I can't really find anything obvious to say about it and I want to go to bed right now so later. I really like how John starts going further and further on the bus ride, it is really well paced and your characterization throughout is very slick. Nice work.

So is fan fiction okay here? I'm working on a story right now that is basically a retelling of Kill la Kill episode 20 spoiler I am worried that episode 21 tomorrow is going to ruin some of the ideas I've built up and there's no way I'll finish it tonight (and it's just a first draft besides), so I just wanted to throw that out there!

(god I used to never write fanfiction but I seem to have caught the bug lately :/ )
petal said:
Hey just want to let you know that I like this. I would love to give some more in-depth criticism but I can't really find anything obvious to say about it and I want to go to bed right now so later. I really like how John starts going further and further on the bus ride, it is really well paced and your characterization throughout is very slick. Nice work.
Thank you, friend. Always nice to know the views aren't just people looking at it and going "shit my nignog takyon that's a lotta words you got there." My plan for the next part definitely involves her feet so grimace/hype yourself accordingly. Also, subject to change but spoiler

I personally don't do fanfiction, KLK, or spoiler so I won't be much help, but it will probably be appreciated by someone here.
Any story type is allowed on this thread provided its not something that is made to attack/make fun of/ or do any form of harm to another person
Comments on my first emcsa story is welcome: http://mcstories.com/PrettyGirl/PrettyGirl.html
A website inducts a mother and daughter, dom gender intentionally ambiguous.

I've been rejected 2 weeks in a row on my next story and I'm getting a little peeved. The latest time is because Simon has a strict no-TG rule that wasn't mentioned in his FAQ. Nevermind that the only guy who goes TG does so mostly to get written out of the story and increase the ratio of women to men... *sigh*
So I don't know if I'm going to write him out completely to "get published" or what. Frankly I think one human being manually filtering, formatting, and uploading once a week with a handful of pre-determined tags is a silly way to run a website in 2014. I wonder if anyone could ever provide an alternative. *cough cough*

Here's how it stands now, comments welcome:
http://pastebin.com/MH9XQ28M
A milkshake shop sexes up those who frequent it. The girls throw themselves at the guys, but the guys aren't technically in control either; it's just a pointless sex conspiracy I guess :p It's kind of a sampler platter of a few of my favorite fetishes.
http://pastebin.com/gHTUX2TY

I actually forgot to have Shine do some fun stuff to Vodka, but I think she'll have some fun when she wakes up.

Tags: maledom, femsub, masturbation

Part 4 brought to you by whips.