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greasyi
>> #23016
Posted on 2014-07-18 01:59:45
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I get the strong impression that this was a one-draft work. If you save it and re-open it at least a day later, you can see the text with fresher eyes and flesh out or clarify parts that aren't as great as they seemed at first.

Luciola
>> #23024
Posted on 2014-07-18 02:19:29
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eeeeeeehhhhhhh

greasyi
>> #23029
Posted on 2014-07-18 04:22:40
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The Internet (and humanity in general) said, about everything that ever happened, anywhere:
eeeeeeehhhhhhh


TakyonH
>> #23032
Posted on 2014-07-18 04:34:12
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A good start would be to pick either past tense or present tense. Flip a coin if you need to, but take one and stick to it.

ClueElf
>> #65107
Posted on 2015-07-30 18:39:15
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A bit late to comment now, but I think it's amazing, even considering the typo stuff.

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