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This was a request from foffyoul5. I hope you enjoy it and also hope that you see improvement from my past work!
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PoV switched from our faceless protag to Sinon
EoD said:
PoV switched from our faceless protag to Sinon
Is that a bad thing?
HypnoNinja said:
Is that a bad thing?
It throws the perspective off, and since we'd just gotten most of the story in the PoV of one person, switching it to another person's confuses things. Not to mention it's still phrased as though we're in the perspective of the protag, so it just looks like he's somehow able to read her mind.
SomeCallMeSalty said:
It throws the perspective off, and since we'd just gotten most of the story in the PoV of one person, switching it to another person's confuses things. Not to mention it's still phrased as though we're in the perspective of the protag, so it just looks like he's somehow able to read her mind.
Thanks for the advice