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Sky
>> #254391
Posted on 2018-05-28 12:54:51
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This will be the last time i upload this pic if it doesn't work im just gonna be working on something else

bugmenot
>> #254394
Posted on 2018-05-28 13:26:44
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Sky said:
This will be the last time i upload this pic if it doesn't work im just gonna be working on something else


Did you ask anyone to proofread this after the old version was taken down? Because there are still multiple errors.

Edit: Apparently you did, but you didn't take all of the feedback into account. You still failed to capitalize the first word of most of your sentences, which is something that was specifically pointed out to you. You also misspelled "will".

You really should've posted this in the feedback thread and asked if there were any mistakes left, and only uploaded it if they told you it was error-free.

Thage
>> #254409
Posted on 2018-05-28 15:06:38
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Just a side note, you don't capitalize after ellipses.

Sky
>> #254410
Posted on 2018-05-28 15:08:45
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bugmenot said:
Did you ask anyone to proofread this after the old version was taken down? Because there are still multiple errors.

Edit: Apparently you did, but you didn't take all of the feedback into account. You still failed to capitalize the first word of most of your sentences, which is something that was specifically pointed out to you. You also misspelled "will".

You really should've posted this in the feedback thread and asked if there were any mistakes left, and only uploaded it if they told you it was error-free.


I did take in the feedback. And what sentances isn't capitalized? And what are the errors? I changes all the text and took it directly from the proofreader

bugmenot
>> #254420
Posted on 2018-05-28 15:54:55
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Thage said:
Just a side note, you don't capitalize after ellipses.


My mistake. I don't use them often, so I forgot you only capitalize the first word after an ellipses if it begins a new grammatical sentence.

Sky said:
I did take in the feedback. And what sentances isn't capitalized? And what are the errors? I changes all the text and took it directly from the proofreader


Sorry if this reply isn't very detailed, but it's late here and I don't feel like typing much.

First, make sure you use spaces after periods. Second, use three periods in your ellipses; sometimes you use four instead. Third, D.Va and Mei's text colors appear to switch after the second image.

I just feel like you should have posted this in the art crit thread and made sure everything looked good before you posted it on the hub proper.

Sky
>> #254421
Posted on 2018-05-28 16:06:35
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bugmenot said:
My mistake. I don't use them often, so I forgot you only capitalize the first word after an ellipses if it begins a new grammatical sentence.

Sorry if this reply isn't very detailed, but it's late here and I don't feel like typing much.

First, make sure you use spaces after periods. Second, use three periods in your ellipses; sometimes you use four instead. Third, D.Va and Mei's text colors appear to switch after the second image.

I just feel like you should have posted this in the art crit thread and made sure everything looked good before you posted it on the hub proper.


O i never noticed that about the text if I'm to do this again I'll fix it. I could always say its from d.vas phone after the photo is sent

PresidentAuroch
>> #255588
Posted on 2018-06-03 22:24:34
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The only problem here is the wull/will thing.

thedude2434
>> #538254
Posted on 2024-03-16 19:29:04
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These might be the dumbest notes I've ever seen

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