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>> #32723
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>> #32728
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And then...
And then and then and then and then AND THEN...!!!
Sorry. XD
Just got the feeling that the transitions were a bit repetitive, is all.
>> #32730
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>> #32733
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And then...
And then...
And then and then and then and then AND THEN...!!!
Sorry. XD
Just got the feeling that the transitions were a bit repetitive, is all.
This, and the fact that it was oddly specific about the time in pharagraph 3.
>> #32750
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This, and the fact that it was oddly specific about the time in pharagraph 3.
I felt it was needed to keep track of how long the vid was going on for.
>> #32751
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I felt like this was almost really really good but was spoiled by being kind of a rushed summary, if that makes any sense? It tries so hard to hit every single point of what specifically happened, like a really detailed story, while not actually taking the time for storytelling, like a manip with limited text space.
Besides the weirdness of really specific timing, "deepest trance ever" is weird with no established history of hypnosis, and the last 2 paragraphs seem really focused on how good she felt and not so much on like... being hypnotized, or feeling good because of the hypnosis. It sounds a lot like she's making decisions on her own without much implication that watching the video had anything to do with it. As a result I think it's kind of missing the mark for this fetish.
>> #32752
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Stuff
Pretty much my opinion as well. The text's just too much like a summary, with a little bit of an overemphasis on actions instead of emotion, or lack thereof. And there's a tad too much repetition, and not in the good way.
Plus, the manip part is a little cheap too. Or maybe that's just me.
>> #32754
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Pretty much my opinion as well. The text's just too much like a summary, with a little bit of an overemphasis on actions instead of emotion, or lack thereof. And there's a tad too much repetition, and not in the good way.
Plus, the manip part is a little cheap too. Or maybe that's just me.
Here's the more detailed version I made.
hypnohub.net/post/show/20237
>> #32755
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I wasn't gonna be the first to say anything because I'm already getting a reputation as a jerk...
I felt like this was almost really really good but was spoiled by being kind of a rushed summary, if that makes any sense? It tries so hard to hit every single point of what specifically happened, like a really detailed story, while not actually taking the time for storytelling, like a manip with limited text space.
Besides the weirdness of really specific timing, "deepest trance ever" is weird with no established history of hypnosis, and the last 2 paragraphs seem really focused on how good she felt and not so much on like... being hypnotized, or feeling good because of the hypnosis. It sounds a lot like she's making decisions on her own without much implication that watching the video had anything to do with it. As a result I think it's kind of missing the mark for this fetish.
Thanks for the critique.