Posted on 2013-12-31 15:24:40
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Wonderful manip! Love the story, I've never seen this idea before, great job.

Posted on 2013-12-31 17:38:54
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The text font looks a little bland. Now I am not someone that wants some fancy fonts all the time (i prefer readability), however it is always appreciated if you use a font that is appropriate to the mood, or use a manga-looking font to make it look more like a manga translation/text. I like the use of the colors to show which one is talking (use it in my manips as well). Using a less strong compression/format would help. I can see plenty of artifacts around the text and even picture areas as well.

Lastly the look on her face. In the text you explain it with "blinding pleasure", but that doesn't show up in her face. I usually change the mouth to make the face look more ecstatic. Clone skin looking area over her mouth and search for a more appropriate mouth and fit it into place in another layer. Blur softly (don't overdo it) around the edges to make it fit.

I'd also advise you to work on empty_eyes instead of spiral ones. They would probably go a lot better with this setting. Spiral eyes work better if you make someone go crazy, empty eyes work better with doll/expressionless and/or happy trance.

Posted on 2013-12-31 19:46:49
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Appreciate the critique, HypnoMangaEditor. If I ever get a time machine, I'll be sure to go back three and a half years and tell myself. ;)

This is from the batch of my very first manips, and I'll admit they were pretty crude, considering I did them all in MS Paint. Just taking Vanndril's advice to trickle over all my work from the HPC. I promise I'm a much better manipper than this one might suggest.

Posted on 2013-12-31 20:10:59
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I could let you use one of those, but you'd have to join the lab. #Okabe

Posted on 2014-01-01 02:54:47
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Tuturu~