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- Id: 177059
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Posted: 2023-08-08 12:25:12
by VortexMaster - Size: 1024x768
- Source: www.deviantart.com/elmer-...-the-Collective-964778442
- Rating: Safe
- Score: 64 (vote up)
>> #517158
Score: 4 (vote Up)
Writer to writer, well done - just be careful of repeating the same word multiple times in a short space (P5, 'relentless, p10, severed). I keep a dictionary and thesaurus tab close at hand myself. Aside from that nice writing - I'd like to hear more backstory and/or results on either side, like how this machine got in, or about how the world she had been tricked to see outside as free, happy people was actually already becoming a land of slaves, and then after her conversion, about how she enacts her new power and how it helps convert the city. :)
>> #517477
Score: 3 (vote Up)
Second, taking a little time to make sure there's a small space between where the image ends and your text box begins can do wonders. When there's not enough of that, letters with vertical lines like I, L, B and P can get kind of sucked up by the edge of the image when they start a new line. The same goes for the other places where text box meets outer edge, like the first time Zephyria is mentioned at the top.