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Posted: 2014-09-24 20:08:33
by DragonIce - Size: 1495x1193
- Source: www.pixiv.net/member_illu...um&illust_id=27451453
- Rating: Explicit
- Score: 132 (vote up)
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>> #29716
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>> #29718
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"Grove"? Also, there's punctuation other than ellipses, you know this, yes?
Grow*
I feel like 3 dots is the most natural punctation to use when separating different thoughts.
>> #29722
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Grow*
I feel like 3 dots is the most natural punctation to use when separating different thoughts.
I get a strong feeling that English is not your first language. Ellipse use should generally be minimized unless you're doing some next-level poetry or something. You get more leeway in hypnosis things than typical literature because thoughts trailing off is a more common thing here, but you still should probably not use more than a couple per paragraph. If a sentence can end in a period, it should. Also, "its" = possessive (it owns something,) "it's" = it is (it does something.) Write in gdocs or Word or OO or something with spellchecking, too.
>> #29724
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I get a strong feeling that English is not your first language.
It is not. My first language is Ukrainian.
>> #29742
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Apart that, it's cute :D
>> #29744
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English is not my language as well, but I can clearly see that there are some typos in that text. it's nice, but I suggest you to get somebody who can read-proof your text before modifying the picture ^_^
Apart that, it's cute :D
Well, I notice a lot of my typos myself after taking a break for a few hours when I have a second look at my text, but I have not noticed them before.
>> #29812
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Well, I notice a lot of my typos myself after taking a break for a few hours when I have a second look at my text, but I have not noticed them before.
It happens to me too, when I write some of my stories. I usually let the story "rest" for a while (maybe even a day or so) and then I re-read it, and usually I find some typos or something to correct. Try to do that, next time ^_^