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masd23
>> #46320
Posted on 2015-02-16 06:41:20
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From this manip I learned two things:
First, I really don't like spiral eyes.
Second, I am getting less and less confident with the texts I write.
Leaving that aside, as always, all feedbacks are welcome (Also I didn't tagged this as loli because suou doesn't seems like a loli in this picture, or, at least, for she doesn't. If it is wrong, I will fix it asap.)
Cradily
>> #46326
Posted on 2015-02-16 07:11:53
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masd23 said:


You don't like how spiral eyes look, or don't like making spiral eyes? =O

For the text, I'm pretty sure you can ask on the forums somewhere for somebody to proofread the text for you before you upload. In this case the only problem I see is 'Then, you will (be) pleasuring me', and if you're being picky you could capitalize the name 'Suou-chan'.
Mister Vi
>> #46328
Posted on 2015-02-16 07:16:07
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Authentic translation errors going on here.
masd23
>> #46334
Posted on 2015-02-16 07:29:44
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Cradily said:
You don't like how spiral eyes look, or don't like making spiral eyes? =O


Mostly the second one because it takes me a lot of effort to make them look in a ways that let's me happy.

Cradily said:
For the text, I'm pretty sure you can ask on the forums somewhere for somebody to proofread the text for you before you upload. In this case the only problem I see is 'Then, you will (be) pleasuring me', and if you're being picky you could capitalize the name 'Suou-chan'.


I suppose I will have to do that since I am also finding errors like that in my others manips.

ffvi1994 said:
Authentic translation errors going on here.


Yeah, I thought my English was good enough to do this but it seems like I was wrong.
Mister Vi
>> #46337
Posted on 2015-02-16 08:18:16
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masd23 said:

Yeah, I thought my English was good enough to do this but it seems like I was wrong.


Your English is fine. The most important thing is that you were understood. It's the grammar that is flawed, and that takes much more time to get right. There seem to be plenty of people able to help. If you used them to your advantage then these would go perfectly
EoD
>> #46348
Posted on 2015-02-16 11:02:03
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Th-those aren't her friends...she...never met them *huddles alone in the "cares about canon" corner*
masd23
>> #46374
Posted on 2015-02-16 17:08:37
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ffvi1994 said:
Your English is fine. The most important thing is that you were understood. It's the grammar that is flawed, and that takes much more time to get right. There seem to be plenty of people able to help. If you used them to your advantage then these would go perfectly


Thanks, that makes me feel a little better with myself.

EoD said:
Th-those aren't her friends...she...never met them *huddles alone in the "cares about canon" corner*


Well, they aren't her friends but she does met kiko in the series.
Vanndril
>> #46433
Posted on 2015-02-17 07:33:42
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EoD said:
Th-those aren't her friends...she...never met them *huddles alone in the "cares about canon" corner*


It doesn't matter, because Gemini of the Meteor was terrible anyway.

The only good thing to come out of that season was Suou. <3
qwaszx
>> #46530
Posted on 2015-02-18 05:56:29
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Vanndril said:
It doesn't matter, because Gemini of the Meteor was terrible anyway.

The only good thing to come out of that season was Suou. <3


the music was awesome though
Vanndril
>> #46532
Posted on 2015-02-18 06:04:59
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qwaszx said:
the music was awesome though


You got me there. I remember liking the music.
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