Posted on 2015-02-19 00:48:55
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First attempt at a manip. Thoughts?

Posted on 2015-02-19 01:06:54
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Not bad for a first attempt. The text effects are a nice touch but the layout could be better (lot of space at the bottom). Also not sure about the font choice. But yeah keep it up

Posted on 2015-02-19 01:16:58
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I agree with EotM on the layout, what I would recommend is maybe shrinking both the font and the size of that text box for a small amount of text like that. I do like the layering for emphasis.

The text is simplistic, but I think it's fine to be simplistic. It explains the scene and leaves a lot up to the imagination in just two sentences.

Everyone uses different fonts, but my normal recommendation is Anime Ace or a plain Sans font for some text, if you'd like to experiment with those a bit!

Also, when you upload a manip, if you have a source link, please include it if you can ^^

Posted on 2015-02-19 03:10:10
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What did you use to make the manip in?

There's not really a source, so I can't really comment on how manipped the drink and the eyes are(if they are at all). One thing is that you should try and format your text so that it's a bit more spaced out and centered if you're partitioning a separate portion from the picture part. Also, there's a great thread on the forums that really goes into how to break into making manips(<<hypnohub.net/forum/show/2317|Here>>)

Guides in there range from the basics of using GIMP and getting started(by PomPom) to making advanced gifs via programming(from EdgeOfTheMoon).

I just started making manips and stories myself a bit more than a month ago, so I'd be happy to swap stuff with ya for both feedback and critique, as I'm always looking for input to get better.

Posted on 2015-02-22 19:37:26
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Well, you caught me in a bitchy and critical mood today. So take what I say with a grain of salt and realize that if you stop because I'm bitchy and critical today, I'll be sad when I'm not bitchy.

So: your blue S in the figure 'strange' is a capital letter. The s in the white ground is a lowercase letter. That is inconsistent.

You also used blue type on a black background. This is a sin because blue blends into black. On it's own its hard to read. The placement makes it seem like they are actively floating above the seen, shining white light down. This clashes with your otherwise appropriate content.

Water is a missed opportunity in my eyes. I'd use color manipulation tools in raster editor to make that stuff blue (or whatever color I chose to make here eyes and the type.

Also, because I want your opinion rather than mine: What tone or mood did you want this to project?