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PrincessLucina
>> #65477
Posted on 2015-08-02 10:35:36
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So, the Finale here! Sorry if some of you don't like how it nds, but, that was how I planned it when I first wrote the Series. Also, Tried something new in putting Tharja's Shadow in Front of Nowi, hopefully it doesn't bother you all, Either Way, Enjoy! I'll be posting a New Poll soon, so, Stay Tuned!

HypnoMangaEditor
>> #65478
Posted on 2015-08-02 10:47:54
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I really, REALLY like the darkness in this manip. It's well done.

A couple of problems I see with your manips though (mainly the text):

- Lots of text and always pretty small, maybe less is an option? Or split it into one text on the right and one on the left? Makes it easier to read on portable/small devices.
- Different colors make it good to see the difference between the persons talking, but try to make the flavortext (e.g. "Tiki gently pushed thetome aside, smiling.") a third color if possible. A blank white would probably fit best if you use a black background.
- You are using a lot of "dialog xyz" abc said/abc replied/abc yelled/abc exclaimed - almost exclusively through all your text. Try to mix it up and not include stuff like "blablub", Tharja said - if you can use the color to make it obvious which person is talking.

I see no problems with the graphical parts in this manip, but if you can make your story flow a little better it'll be even better. :)

PrincessLucina
>> #65479
Posted on 2015-08-02 10:51:51
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HypnoMangaEditor said:
I really, REALLY like the darkness in this manip. It's well done.

A couple of problems I see with your manips though (mainly the text):

- Lots of text and always pretty small, maybe less is an option? Or split it into one text on the right and one on the left? Makes it easier to read on portable/small devices.
- Different colors make it good to see the difference between the persons talking, but try to make the flavortext (e.g. "Tiki gently pushed thetome aside, smiling.") a third color if possible. A blank white would probably fit best if you use a black background.
- You are using a lot of "dialog xyz" abc said/abc replied/abc yelled/abc exclaimed - almost exclusively through all your text. Try to mix it up and not include stuff like "blablub", Tharja said - if you can use the color to make it obvious which person is talking.

I see no problems with the graphical parts in this manip, but if you can make your story flow a little better it'll be even better. :)


Sounds good! Well, Improvement is ALWAYS an option! I do tend to use it a lot, just because that's how I usually specify speech, but, I can try not using it, and, I'll try out the Text Enlarging too. I can usually read it just fine, but, I understand how it can be tough on Mobile.

HypnoMangaEditor
>> #65480
Posted on 2015-08-02 10:59:40
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You have to also account for the site making your image smaller (especially if you edit higher res images) and fucking up an already small font. Thats why a bigger font is rarely a bad choice.

PrincessLucina
>> #65481
Posted on 2015-08-02 11:04:21
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HypnoMangaEditor said:
You have to also account for the site making your image smaller (especially if you edit higher res images) and fucking up an already small font. Thats why a bigger font is rarely a bad choice.


Noted. Yeah, I usually work with High-Res Images so I put out the best work I can. I'll try to get better with it.

UberNimrod
>> #65508
Posted on 2015-08-02 17:27:14
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Purification tag?

Only thing I can see that is strange.

PrincessLucina
>> #65511
Posted on 2015-08-02 17:41:54
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UberNimrod said:
Purification tag?

Only thing I can see that is strange.


I put it as Tharja is basically going from Power-Crazy Dark Mage to The Servant of the Goddess of Protection (In Fire Emblem's World). It just seems to make sense.

HypnoHammer
>> #65517
Posted on 2015-08-02 18:53:55
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UberNimrod said:
Purification tag?

Only thing I can see that is strange.


I think the best way to describe it would be reverse corruption. like instead of an angel girl becoming a demon girl, it's the other way around

turtleguru
>> #65525
Posted on 2015-08-02 20:37:09
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hmm...mind if I make a fanfic outta this? I'm gonna change the ending though...

PrincessLucina
>> #65526
Posted on 2015-08-02 20:37:57
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turtleguru said:
hmm...mind if I make a fanfic outta this? I'm gonna change the ending though...


Sure! Just be sure to share it with me!

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