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StrokeSlave
>> #67860
Posted on 2015-08-24 07:42:02
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My first attempt at any sort of caption writing, not up to the standard of a lot of stuff on here but i hope to get better at it with practice.

Mindwipe
>> #67863
Posted on 2015-08-24 08:00:08
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I'm confused. Misaki can already brainwash people with her powers. Why does she need a device? I mean, I know she carries around a remote, but doesn't she just use it to channel her powers? And why have spiral eyes? Her eyes already have the sparkles, and that's what her brainwashed victims have too.

ClueElf
>> #67866
Posted on 2015-08-24 08:06:40
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Mindwipe said:
I'm confused. Misaki can already brainwash people with her powers. Why does she need a device? I mean, I know she carries around a remote, but doesn't she just use it to channel her powers? And why have spiral eyes? Her eyes already have the sparkles, and that's what her brainwashed victims have too.


Theory: The manipper may not be familiar with the series, and just picked a good looking picture to manip. Just a guess though.


TheCreepingError
>> #67869
Posted on 2015-08-24 08:39:30
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I don't want to come across as a nitpicky asshole but you should really look into editing your writing before posting it up. Almost every instance of the word "I" is uncapitalized, there are a number of instances in which the you start a new sentence with a lower case letter and to top it off, almost every section is a run on sentence that would read much better if it were split into multiple sentences. The writing itself is perfectly fine but the errors are really distracting which kind of brings the whole piece down.

StrokeSlave
>> #67874
Posted on 2015-08-24 09:34:53
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ClueElf said:
Theory: The manipper may not be familiar with the series, and just picked a good looking picture to manip. Just a guess though.


Bingo

TheCreepingError said:
I don't want to come across as a nitpicky asshole but you should really look into editing your writing before posting it up. Almost every instance of the word "I" is uncapitalized, there are a number of instances in which the you start a new sentence with a lower case letter and to top it off, almost every section is a run on sentence that would read much better if it were split into multiple sentences. The writing itself is perfectly fine but the errors are really distracting which kind of brings the whole piece down.


I genuinely forgot to check for stuff like that after i finished it, i was meaning to do it as well. I got caught up making the animation probably.

TheCreepingError
>> #67875
Posted on 2015-08-24 09:50:43
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StrokeSlave said:
I genuinely forgot to check for stuff like that after i finished it, i was meaning to do it as well. I got caught up making the animation probably.


It happens. That's why it helps to have a proofreader. Alternately, once you finish the animation and writing, give yourself an hour to go do something else, then come back and look it over. A bit of time away from your work lets you see errors that you'd have otherwise overlooked in all of the excitement of having finished a piece.

Master_Bates
>> #67880
Posted on 2015-08-24 12:02:47
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ClueElf said:
Theory: The manipper may not be familiar with the series, and just picked a good looking picture to manip. Just a guess though.




StrokeSlave said:
Bingo




This situation is kind of funny to me. Artist makes a manip of an image not knowing the character can control minds anyway and the scene might have already been MC before the manip.

Great animation nonetheless.

Reiner89
>> #67890
Posted on 2015-08-24 14:08:34
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I think it works better with hypnotized hypnotist to be honest. Here's my suggested text:


I obey my Master...
He took my power,
and turned it back against me.
He seduce me...
Entranced me...

I obey my Master
I use my powers to enslave others
Others may taste...
Others may feel...
Others may surrender...

Your eyes on me...
Your mind fuzzy...
Your will fading...

Sink deeper...
Fall deeper...
The deeper you go...
The better I feel...
The better I feel...
The deeper you go...

Now cum for your new Mistress!



Jeix_fg
>> #67891
Posted on 2015-08-24 14:10:47
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Love it!

Metals
>> #67918
Posted on 2015-08-25 00:27:37
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@_@..

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