Posted on 2015-11-06 23:40:46
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I made a second manip. I've had this picture for years so I have no idea where I got it or if its even character or something.

if anyone knows let me know. as for tags, I probably missed some or didn't put some in right so if some one could help out with them id be very thankful.

I welcome all constructive criticism.

Posted on 2015-11-06 23:57:51
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Hi!

Overall you did well! Two important things to keep in mind when tagging images in the future:
-It's better to use the "furry" tag instead of "animal" for human-like characters like this. If you ever want to tag an image with a specific animal in it (like, for example, a snake. Snakes pop up constantly here.) it's best to use the specific type of animal as a tag.
-When crediting yourself or another artist or manipper, start the tag with "artist:" This way you'll get it in the cool yellow font at the top of the tag list. (Example: here I just wrote "artist:mistress_marea_(manipper)"

Posted on 2015-11-07 04:25:10
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So wonderful mistress *drools*

Posted on 2015-11-07 04:25:12
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So wonderful mistress *drools*

Posted on 2015-11-07 10:04:33
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One other thing to always tag is whether its femdom, femsub, maledom, malesub, etc. Since his doesn't say whether the narrator is male or female, you leave out which is the dom. Added femsub for obvious reasons that seem to be obvious.

Beyond that, just spell check a bit. I'm a bit on the "the text should be perfect" side, not everyone is. Beyond spelling/grammar errors, it is really quite good! I hope to see more from you :D

Posted on 2015-11-07 10:56:53
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Ohh very lovely. I can't wait to see more.

Posted on 2015-11-08 00:34:49
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I like it. It has a simple, yet enjoyable story and the picture fits well. Only problem: I obsess over detail.

The format of the text is somewhat distracting from the story, the lower case "i" in some locations, no apostrophe in "Id" or "didnt" and the spacing is awkward, the first five lines are farther back than the rest, there is extra space before "forward", and the space distribution, I don't know if it's the font (the Ls for example) or just the line spacing itself but my eyes are drawn too those oddly shaped spaces.

Some things that may help in this regard: For the i/Id problems, typing this in a word processor beforehand or someone else proofread it is a good idea. For the spacing, if you aren't already, sticking everything in the same box should improve things, using justified text when the text box is this thin might help, as should fiddling with you line spacing (if the program you use lets you).

Overall, I'd say... 3.5/5 but adjusting you text would kick it up to 4.5

P.S. Small caps(in my opinion) looks weird, but that might just be me.