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waverun
>> #88983
Posted on 2016-02-12 01:47:43
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I take no credit for the original artwork, which is liked in the source. All credit for it goes to Sixpathsoffriendship of E621, this is just an edit that I enjoyed making. And yes, it does contain twerking, if that's your thing. Enjoy.
-Waverun
manshadow3
>> #88998
Posted on 2016-02-12 03:42:57
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Only real critique is to maybe not say the reader is doing something I don't know about others but it is a little off putting to me...maybe imply that the reader is doing the action through the character's text
waverun
>> #89000
Posted on 2016-02-12 04:17:49
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manshadow3 said:
Only real critique is to maybe not say the reader is doing something I don't know about others but it is a little off putting to me...maybe imply that the reader is doing the action through the character's text


Well, it's not supposed to be like an actual action the reader is performing. It's just for people to commit to the usage of their minds and imagine what it's like to go through that, not to actually do the action itself in real life.
It's hypno porn, so I would assume it's just for people to commit their fantasies to through their minds, since they can's do it in real life.
manshadow3
>> #89002
Posted on 2016-02-12 04:37:46
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waverun said:
Well, it's not supposed to be like an actual action the reader is performing. It's just for people to commit to the usage of their minds and imagine what it's like to go through that, not to actually do the action itself in real life.
It's hypno porn, so I would assume it's just for people to commit their fantasies to through their minds, since they can's do it in real life.


Yeah I didn't mean the reader physically do it but saying what the reader is doing like your arms growing heavy and starting to drool just kinda kicks me out of it I'm sorry if I can't get the words from my head to text to explain it properly that's something that happens a lot to me
plsignore
>> #89003
Posted on 2016-02-12 04:54:56
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Yeah, gotta agree that putting *actions* like that is awkward as fuck, especially in the second person like that. It looks and reads better if you stick just to dialogue or prose, no roleplaying.

A better option would be to either replace the *actions* with dialogue from the protagonist, or turn the entire thing into one long monologue from the girl.

Speaking of which, that image has some weird anatomy. The girl's neck looks broken
waverun
>> #89005
Posted on 2016-02-12 05:16:36
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plsignore said:
Yeah, gotta agree that putting *actions* like that is awkward as fuck, especially in the second person like that. It looks and reads better if you stick just to dialogue or prose, no roleplaying.

A better option would be to either replace the *actions* with dialogue from the protagonist, or turn the entire thing into one long monologue from the girl.

Speaking of which, that image has some weird anatomy. The girl's neck looks broken


Yeah, the original artist drew it that way. I just edited the manip into it.
Banjooie
>> #89019
Posted on 2016-02-12 07:54:54
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Yeah, don't put actions in my...hands? It throws me off. Otherwise, hey, Vinyl as top never happens.
DerpySkies
>> #89035
Posted on 2016-02-12 12:07:05
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Who has time for minor details when there's porn to be enjoyed! Great work; rock on Waverun! Dj pone is best pone
Pinkanator
>> #89048
Posted on 2016-02-12 18:59:59
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Still seeing a distinct lack of Lyra around here... My self-entitlement won't stand for this!
Relanor
>> #89096
Posted on 2016-02-13 03:42:53
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Still, the hub does need more drool.
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