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  • Id: 39057
  • Posted: 2016-08-07 20:58:22
    by vahn_yourdoom
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  • Rating: Explicit
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greasyi
>> #118620
Posted on 2016-08-07 21:07:36
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I had to read the text 3 times to understand it. "Thereof" is one word, and the punctuation is weird because that's not a comma situation and the empty space plus lack of a period made me assume it was a GIF and I was waiting for the rest of the sentence.
vahn_yourdoom
>> #118621
Posted on 2016-08-07 21:11:44
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greasyi said:
I had to read the text 3 times to understand it. "Thereof" is one word, and the punctuation is weird because that's not a comma situation and the empty space plus lack of a period made me assume it was a GIF and I was waiting for the rest of the sentence.


dam, i'll fix it on the pixiv version, i guess, thanks !!
MasakakiKairi
>> #118634
Posted on 2016-08-07 23:09:55
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well done
vahn_yourdoom
>> #118635
Posted on 2016-08-07 23:12:09
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MasakakiKairi said:
well done


thanks!
Siithichan
>> #118640
Posted on 2016-08-08 00:33:13
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Fumika looks lovely~ I totally support her newfound frankness (in my own way)
But leave Arisu pure for me :P
rocketracer294
>> #118731
Posted on 2016-08-08 08:31:40
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vahn_yourdoom said:
dam, i'll fix it on the pixiv version, i guess, thanks !!


Punctuation wise, you need a period or a semicolon at the end of the first line.
slipslideman
>> #118761
Posted on 2016-08-08 13:23:32
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Also, the second line doesn't make sense in relation to having a "Shy problem".

"In fact, now the problem is the lack [of 'shy problem']."

If the first line read "Fumika's shyness is no longer a problem" or "Fumika's problem with shyness is no more", then the second line would make more sense, since the second line would become:

"In fact, now the problem is the lack [of shyness]"
JimLogan54
>> #118762
Posted on 2016-08-08 13:39:44
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What's that line between her legs...?
vahn_yourdoom
>> #118862
Posted on 2016-08-09 06:40:48
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thanks for all the grammar fixes, guys XD

@Jim
it's a rotor cable :p
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