Posted on 2017-01-24 14:17:59
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And now the cowgirl fun can begin.

Honestly, this is one of the pictures I have a couple of hang-ups on regarding how it turned out. Here there were a couple of things that were hard to notice in line-art that I wish I had caught because they don't fit my personal taste.

However, I feel quite proud of what I did with the actual writing itself. I was inspired by this "mind as bodily fluids" metaphor I've seen pop up on the hub once or twice, thought it would be sexy to apply to milk. Let me know what you think!

Posted on 2017-01-24 14:27:31
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Not an uncommon metaphor as far as hypnosis goes, but a sexy reliable one at that.
Given the nature of the picture I would have however used the opportunity to meld the physical pleasure she feels with the growing emptiness of her mind as she becomes overwhelmed by sensations rather than rational thoughts.

Posted on 2017-01-24 14:43:14
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Damn, yeah, missed opportunity there.

Posted on 2017-01-24 15:17:29
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My guess is you'll have the opportunity to work on that in next pages ^^
Overall I think the structure could have been made better with a view from Camila and the view from Mozu.

Posted on 2017-01-24 17:15:37
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I might be able to add another bit of text to this picture segment before the next one, if I can think of anything to write to describe her total loss of self from her own perspective.

As for showing things from Mozu's perspective, I don't think that would've been a good idea. Mostly because it would reveal stuff I wanted to reveal later, but also because I wouldn't know what to write for her. I find the view of somebody blissfully surrendering themselves to be more interesting and fun to write for than the view of the person who has them in the palm of their hands.

Posted on 2017-01-24 20:09:26
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Milk~