Posted on 2017-05-06 12:48:59
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Hey guys so this is my first manip and I would really appreciate any constructive criticism.

Posted on 2017-05-06 13:51:16
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Apart from some grammar mistakes, it's not bad

Posted on 2017-05-06 19:18:08
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I really like the style of the story/writing, and the fact that it's D.va! The only thing I'd say is to make the text black or turn it to black background and white text, it'd just flow abit better and be better on the eyes. at least in my opinion. It could just be me XD

Posted on 2017-05-07 05:33:27
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A good picture-story combo! Well-picked font as well. Next time though, a spell-checker and/or proofreader could get those pesky grammar- and spelling errors out of there :)

Posted on 2017-11-28 12:16:41
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A little late but another bit of advice would've been to explain where the handcuffs in the image come from in the story, as otherwise the image might not feel like it links up with the story as well as it could.

Take care to explain as many noticable points of interest as you can through the text in as natural a way as you can manage, it'll help improve manips for sure! Just make sure you don't go overboard with too many details, just the more noticable and weirder aspects of the image you're using! :)

If you need an example, just imagine an image with a character next to a cat and a chili pepper in front of a computer, we can explain away the cat as her pet and the computer as an induction method or a communication method with their master, but what of the random pepper? Well, we can explain as part of the induction method, just something she was eating at the time, etc., but the important part is that now that we've explained the image and the story feel far more cohesive than they'd otherwise be.

Hope my overly long wall of text helps :p