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Posted: 2018-11-29 19:28:11
by ReyXD.VaXRuby - Size: 1400x1864
- Source: www.pixiv.net/member_illu...um&illust_id=53185191
- Rating: Explicit
- Score: 63 (vote up)
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>> #292194
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>> #292199
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Now I'm looking at it and I didn't notice the amount of white space before. Is that a flagworthy offense?
Not really, so if you want to leave it alone, thats fine, but if you do want to improve upon this image, constructive criticism here, i would say
-prob work weiss's body proportions, mainly id say get rid of the inner curve on the outline on her body(understandable if you do leave it as is, its good enough, also not 100% myself),
-darken some of the white parts on weiss herself (not really sure how you would get those shadows on you)
But honestly, the more important things come with the text, because the drawing is pretty good and gets the job done, (no qualms with background) so criticism on the text:
-Misspelled puppy dog as puupy-dog (no hyphen needed). That being said, I would personally just take out the phrase "with those puppy dog eyes of hers", or change it to like, "with those pretty, deep, alluring eyes of hers" because it conflicts the idea of hypnotic eyes (which, people have creatively used Rubys silver eyes as a hypnotic tool on this site so it makes sense) with Ruby begging, instead of hypnotically forcing her too, because dogs use there eyes for begging, not for hypnosis
-Main thing, if anything, change the color of the text so that it isnt a light color on a white textbox, or better yet, change the color of the text box so its darker. (or a combination of both things darker) would make it much easier to read.
Even if they are minor things, changes to the text would definitely improve the quality of the image as a whole imo. Thank you for taking the time to read this
>> #292203
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Maybe there should have been something and it got forgotten or disappeared?
>> #292208
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Not really, so if you want to leave it alone, thats fine, but if you do want to improve upon this image, constructive criticism here, i would say
-prob work weiss's body proportions, mainly id say get rid of the inner curve on the outline on her body(understandable if you do leave it as is, its good enough, also not 100% myself),
-darken some of the white parts on weiss herself (not really sure how you would get those shadows on you)
But honestly, the more important things come with the text, because the drawing is pretty good and gets the job done, (no qualms with background) so criticism on the text:
-Misspelled puppy dog as puupy-dog (no hyphen needed). That being said, I would personally just take out the phrase "with those puppy dog eyes of hers", or change it to like, "with those pretty, deep, alluring eyes of hers" because it conflicts the idea of hypnotic eyes (which, people have creatively used Rubys silver eyes as a hypnotic tool on this site so it makes sense) with Ruby begging, instead of hypnotically forcing her too, because dogs use there eyes for begging, not for hypnosis
-Main thing, if anything, change the color of the text so that it isnt a light color on a white textbox, or better yet, change the color of the text box so its darker. (or a combination of both things darker) would make it much easier to read.
Even if they are minor things, changes to the text would definitely improve the quality of the image as a whole imo. Thank you for taking the time to read this
agreed on the text, the color choices make it eye straining
I suggest a black font, might be boring, but it's more visible and function-able
>> #292257
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>> #292260
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I also just noticed puupy-dog. Was going for puppy-dog. That sucks
if you plan to do a lot of text manips or stories, I suggest getting a beta reader
when one tries to proof their own reading, they'll often miss errors, either from a lack of understanding, glossing over it, or unconsciously correcting it and not even noticing
>> #292287
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Not really, so if you want to leave it alone, thats fine, but if you do want to improve upon this image, constructive criticism here, i would say
-prob work weiss's body proportions, mainly id say get rid of the inner curve on the outline on her body(understandable if you do leave it as is, its good enough, also not 100% myself),
-darken some of the white parts on weiss herself (not really sure how you would get those shadows on you)
But honestly, the more important things come with the text, because the drawing is pretty good and gets the job done, (no qualms with background) so criticism on the text:
-Misspelled puppy dog as puupy-dog (no hyphen needed). That being said, I would personally just take out the phrase "with those puppy dog eyes of hers", or change it to like, "with those pretty, deep, alluring eyes of hers" because it conflicts the idea of hypnotic eyes (which, people have creatively used Rubys silver eyes as a hypnotic tool on this site so it makes sense) with Ruby begging, instead of hypnotically forcing her too, because dogs use there eyes for begging, not for hypnosis
-Main thing, if anything, change the color of the text so that it isnt a light color on a white textbox, or better yet, change the color of the text box so its darker. (or a combination of both things darker) would make it much easier to read.
Even if they are minor things, changes to the text would definitely improve the quality of the image as a whole imo. Thank you for taking the time to read this
I didn't draw this lmao
>> #292387
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I didn't draw this lmao
O, my b, well, my text points still stand
>> #292390
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