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HypnoHammer
>> #300088
Posted on 2019-01-20 20:18:57
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so let me see if I understand this. Celestia hypnotized her sister into becoming Nightmare Moon so she could portray the slave and steal Twilight and Candence's powers?

qmrt
>> #300091
Posted on 2019-01-20 20:26:24
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HypnoHammer said:
so let me see if I understand this. Celestia hypnotized her sister into becoming Nightmare Moon so she could portray the slave and steal Twilight and Candence's powers?


Not quite. The idea is that she's going to steal Twilight and Cadence's powers, then give them to Luna and trigger her transformation into NMM. And then be her slave. I'm not too happy with the text on this one, I might either take it down and rewrite it or put out a sequel to make things clearer.

Blitz_Habanera
>> #300112
Posted on 2019-01-20 22:38:09
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qmrt said:
Not quite. The idea is that she's going to steal Twilight and Cadence's powers, then give them to Luna and trigger her transformation into NMM. And then be her slave. I'm not too happy with the text on this one, I might either take it down and rewrite it or put out a sequel to make things clearer.

More NMM is always a yes

Lavitts
>> #300113
Posted on 2019-01-20 22:40:55
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qmrt said:
Not quite. The idea is that she's going to steal Twilight and Cadence's powers, then give them to Luna and trigger her transformation into NMM. And then be her slave. I'm not too happy with the text on this one, I might either take it down and rewrite it or put out a sequel to make things clearer.


I vote sequel!

nalak
>> #300144
Posted on 2019-01-21 02:30:57
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How bad is the displeasure with the text? Because if its just that part, I feel like the line works well enough since it doesn't feel unnatural owing to Celestia knowing her own plan and all, if there are more alterations then I can see how it might be something to consider in the revamp.

bullet
>> #300159
Posted on 2019-01-21 05:07:17
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I suppose a re-do for clarity would be good. I got the idea just fine, but if others didn't...
Regardless, I would love a sequel as well.

Grim
>> #300214
Posted on 2019-01-21 11:24:22
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I really liked this, and would love to see more

Kobolum
>> #300270
Posted on 2019-01-21 21:59:32
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I see you’re a fan of friendship is mind control.

qmrt
>> #300275
Posted on 2019-01-21 22:17:59
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Kobolum said:
I see you’re a fan of friendship is mind control.


Fan might be an understatement.

Lloyd01251
>> #346646
Posted on 2019-12-04 19:49:12
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qmrt said:
Fan might be an understatement.


i mean it **is** a rather good story~~

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