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deleted001
>> #7475
Posted on 2014-01-08 03:48:58
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My first post here. I just know that I've already done something wrong.
Nadiatheberzerker
>> #7476
Posted on 2014-01-08 04:05:43
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Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! So cute and romantic!
blazefox
>> #7479
Posted on 2014-01-08 05:00:51
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the feels ;-;
this is so cute TnT
Vanndril
>> #7482
Posted on 2014-01-08 05:15:03
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Marine3950 said:
My first post here. I just know that I've already done something wrong.


Don't be so pessimistic! Your post looks alright. As far as I'm aware, you broke no rules (I made the rules, so I sure hope i would recognize if you broke them XD). As for the manip itself, the writing is quite good; no big issues there. The only "problems" I'd point out are your choice of font, your choice of background color for the text area, and the default left-alignment of the text.

* Your font of choice, while alright, is just...boring. It's not aesthetically pleasing, is all. Your manips would be better off if you found another font to use that looks more decorative but isn't hard to read.

* Your color choices of pitch white for the background and pitch black for the font are a little less aesthetic. Text on pure white backgrounds are generally stressful on the eyes of the reader. Background colors, if you want to use white, should be an off-white. Not quite gray, but not quite bright white, either. Black text color is usable, but, like the point above, is just boring.

* Lastly, you should probably work on your text alignment. See how the text seems to be crashing up against the side of the image at the start of every line? It makes it look less well made when it does that. One simple solution would be to change the type of alignment you use. Maybe align the text to the center. However, for longer texts, that may not work well. In cases with text as large as your caption, you may wish to simply indent the text a little bit, pushing it away from the side of the image. It makes a big difference, despite being so simple.

All in all, it's pretty good. I hope you continue writing new text manips. :)
deleted001
>> #7487
Posted on 2014-01-08 05:34:37
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Vanndril said:
Don't be so pessimistic! Your post looks alright. As far as I'm aware, you broke no rules (I made the rules, so I sure hope I would recognize if you broke them XD). As for the manip itself, the writing is quite good; no big issues there. The only "problems" I'd point out are your choice of font, your choice of background color for the text area, and the default left-alignment of the text.

All in all, it's pretty good. I hope you continue writing new text manips. :)


Alright, thanks. I'm sitting on a couple of other works in progress, so I'll make sure that I apply that to them before I submit. Thanks for the ConCrit.
Vanndril
>> #7489
Posted on 2014-01-08 05:46:19
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Marine3950 said:
Alright, thanks. I'm sitting on a couple of other works in progress, so I'll make sure that I apply that to them before I submit. Thanks for the ConCrit.


Anytime. :)
Mistress_Marea
>> #7492
Posted on 2014-01-08 06:36:11
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I love this
Quantum77z
>> #7493
Posted on 2014-01-08 06:45:09
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yeah wow emotionally uplifting, cool beanz
Svennerson
>> #7498
Posted on 2014-01-08 08:33:12
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I AM TEARS THANK YOU.
NamesAreForTheWeak
>> #7501
Posted on 2014-01-08 10:10:56
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Not sure if the loli tag is necessary here. As far as I'm aware, it's only loli if the underage girl is put in a questionable position, which is decidedly not the case in this manip.

That said, OH GOD THE FEELS. Amazing story, adorable picture.
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