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Cradily
>> #57970
Posted on 2015-05-26 08:33:24
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Rushed it a bit. Is the text too hard to see/anything I should fix?

asaola
>> #57972
Posted on 2015-05-26 09:01:24
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Oh I get it, the other girl is the one hypnotized XD

AAnts
>> #57975
Posted on 2015-05-26 09:26:26
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I don't know which I like better- the girl who's already under, or the one who's reading despite knowing it's supposed to hypnotize her. Very nice!

Muddle
>> #57976
Posted on 2015-05-26 09:49:47
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Cradily said:
Rushed it a bit. Is the text too hard to see/anything I should fix?


Love your writing as always. I didn't have any trouble following it. I'd comment on the text colors maybe needing to contrast a bit more, but that might just be due to my partial color blindness. Either way, love it as is.

Tejyasn
>> #57981
Posted on 2015-05-26 11:56:54
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Perfection.

Yugan
>> #57987
Posted on 2015-05-26 14:46:01
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Recreational hypnosis is one the best! No ill intention, just fun x)

Dreamshade
>> #57990
Posted on 2015-05-26 15:20:54
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Where's the trophy for cutest thing ever?

Neki
>> #57993
Posted on 2015-05-26 16:01:38
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So cuuuute. <3 I love this.

Cradily
>> #58022
Posted on 2015-05-27 01:19:14
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Glad you guys enjoyed it =D Was worried the text would be hard to see due to the pattern on the seat.

Muddle said:
text colors maybe needing to contrast a bit more, but that might just be due to my partial color blindness. Either way, love it as is.


Ah, okay. I'll try to use make the colors more vivid next time. (No promises though, I'm a fan of soft colors.) Or just make it easier to differentiate who is speaking, since it doesn't really follow any structure here.

PomPom
>> #58023
Posted on 2015-05-27 01:24:13
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How did I miss this @_@

This is a really clever idea! And I like the pushy subject there :P

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