Help me fix my manip!
So, today I uploaded a new manip (post #134839), and the feedback I'm getting seems to be that it's confusing and hard to figure out what's going on.
I've been kind of trying to pull of an [[accidental hypnosis]] thing where the dom isn't even aware they've hypnotized the sub at all (because they're just so hot that the pov naturally wants to become their slave), and this was my hand at trying to implement that concept. The idea was that the pov was hearing the highlighted sentence fragments as commands, until the hypnosis entirely takes over and what the unknowing dom's really saying fades into the background.
I'm not really sure how I can make this clearer, aside from making the start less abrupt. Maybe adding a few lines to clarify this is Baltimore talking to the Admiral?
I've been kind of trying to pull of an [[accidental hypnosis]] thing where the dom isn't even aware they've hypnotized the sub at all (because they're just so hot that the pov naturally wants to become their slave), and this was my hand at trying to implement that concept. The idea was that the pov was hearing the highlighted sentence fragments as commands, until the hypnosis entirely takes over and what the unknowing dom's really saying fades into the background.
I'm not really sure how I can make this clearer, aside from making the start less abrupt. Maybe adding a few lines to clarify this is Baltimore talking to the Admiral?