Will anyone help me to improve the qulity of my texts?
I have changed this thread. Instead of looking for someone who wants to beta-read my texts, I will just post it here.
I would appreciate any help... Proofreading for grammar or syntax errors, suggestions, etc...
Inspired by fanart for the anime "Hentai Ouji to Warawanai Neko"
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- ... Please, grant my wish.
- Are you sure?
- Yes!
- You will not be able to cancel your wish after its granted. Do you still wish it?
- Yes.
- Very good Tsukiko, I shall grant your wish... But you have to trust me and follow all of my instructions. I will ask you to do only easy things... Like "close your eyes and listen to every word I say". If you can, feel how nice my voice is, how it is able to carry all of your worries away. My words will transform you, but that is what you want all along. So let my spell sink deeply into you. Before we continue, I want you to promise me that you will accept everything I say as a fact and will not question anything. You can still go back, but you can follow my words, so, do you promise?
- Yes...
- So, follow my words, they sink deep into your mind and you sink together with them. They reach the bottom of your mind and they sleep there. You will sleep as well in 3 seconds. 3...2...1... Sleep... When you wake up, you will be completly different. You will stop being your old self. Expressing human emotions will be impossible for you. Your old human self is gone, its belongs to someone else now, someone you do not even know. Instead, you will be cat girl and will only be able to express your emotions like a cat. It will be easy for you to learn how to act catlike, but you will not be able to act humanlike. Also, you know that I am the God of cats. You will worship me and serve me in every way possible. When I count up to 3, you will wake up full of energy, refresh and your heart will long to be more catlike. 1... 2... 3... Wake up.
- Meow. What did you do? I suddenly fell asleep.
- I granted your wish. By the way, in 1 hour it will be the time for all cat girls to worship me, so get ready.
- Yes, my God.
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Leave a comment in this thread. thank you in advance.
I would appreciate any help... Proofreading for grammar or syntax errors, suggestions, etc...
Inspired by fanart for the anime "Hentai Ouji to Warawanai Neko"
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- ... Please, grant my wish.
- Are you sure?
- Yes!
- You will not be able to cancel your wish after its granted. Do you still wish it?
- Yes.
- Very good Tsukiko, I shall grant your wish... But you have to trust me and follow all of my instructions. I will ask you to do only easy things... Like "close your eyes and listen to every word I say". If you can, feel how nice my voice is, how it is able to carry all of your worries away. My words will transform you, but that is what you want all along. So let my spell sink deeply into you. Before we continue, I want you to promise me that you will accept everything I say as a fact and will not question anything. You can still go back, but you can follow my words, so, do you promise?
- Yes...
- So, follow my words, they sink deep into your mind and you sink together with them. They reach the bottom of your mind and they sleep there. You will sleep as well in 3 seconds. 3...2...1... Sleep... When you wake up, you will be completly different. You will stop being your old self. Expressing human emotions will be impossible for you. Your old human self is gone, its belongs to someone else now, someone you do not even know. Instead, you will be cat girl and will only be able to express your emotions like a cat. It will be easy for you to learn how to act catlike, but you will not be able to act humanlike. Also, you know that I am the God of cats. You will worship me and serve me in every way possible. When I count up to 3, you will wake up full of energy, refresh and your heart will long to be more catlike. 1... 2... 3... Wake up.
- Meow. What did you do? I suddenly fell asleep.
- I granted your wish. By the way, in 1 hour it will be the time for all cat girls to worship me, so get ready.
- Yes, my God.
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Leave a comment in this thread. thank you in advance.