Hmm, Queen of Hearts is a pretty good story. I guess there isn't really any specific laundry list of features I want to see in a good stage hyp story, but there's a few things I tend not to like. Depending on the story, it may not matter though. I generally don't like anything where a guy gets cuckolded by the hypnotist, or some variation of the hypnotist has ulterior motives he or she puts into effect when the show's over. I also don't really like it if they leave permanent suggestions to mess with someone's head afterward. The stories I like the best tend to be ones that focus on the wild kinky shenanigans that happen during the show itself. I also tend to prefer more realistic portrayals of what hypnosis can do. Now that said, there's some stories on my list that still violate some of those preferences, so they aren't really anything that leads to a definite "Nope!" moment. Here's some of what I've found on mcstories as a start:
Sin-dy the X-Rated Hypnotist (we already knew this one)
Busman's Holiday - this is a pretty good one, a little long but worth the read. Also pretty realistically portrayed.
The Girl Next Door - another by the same author as Sin-dy, pretty decent too.
The Show Must Go On - not really my favorite, but I thought I'd mention.
The Measure of a Man
Mistress Mesmera
She Names Him
Excalibur
Hypno-show - also it seems that someone rewrote and expanded this as Mike and Amy: Married to a Hypno-Nympho.
Jenny Loses a Bet - not the most realistic from what I remember, but it's OK.
Making Them Do Things: The Show
Accidently Hypnotized - again, not my favorite, but worth reading.
The Hypnotizing Megan Chronicles - you have to use web archive to find this one (<<
web.archive.org/web/20100...eganChronicles/index.html|here>>), since it's off the site now. Only the first two parts deal with a stage show, though, so I've only paid much attention to them. I know the gist of the rest of it, though. Kelly's bitchiness makes you want to smack her by the end of it.
Anyone read any of these?