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>> #158540
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>> #158586
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As for the writing, there are just a couple typos I noticed, like "psycho" being "pshycho", etc. There are also a couple sentences whose grammar is perhaps just a bit stilted. I'd also be careful about the shift from 'narrator' to 'internal thoughts' because they're the same color in this caption, and it can be a bit difficult to tell when they transition. However, none of that kept me from totally understanding what was going on and enjoying it too, so I wouldn't worry about that too much and just keep it in mind for new ones.
Which brings me to the final point: I do want to see more from you! I hope I see more content like this in the future, if you're willing. It's good stuff, and you can only improve on your writing over time! That's exactly what I did for my own writings. :3
>> #158588
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Hey! Looks like this is your first submission, right? Well, let me say, I like it! You've got a good choice of source picture, for one, which helps a lot, but I have to say the story itself is hot to me. I've always been a sucker for orientation play, and it's done well!
Welp, it's actually 4th my manip, if I got your words correctly. Thanks for comment though.
>> #158806
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