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- ? chloe (jollyalbatross) 1
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- ? jollyalbatross 3
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- ? blue hair 13325
- ? female only 57709
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- ? green eyes 9543
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- Id: 102460
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Posted: 2020-09-05 23:27:50
by JollyAlbatross - Size: 347x471
- Rating: Explicit
- Score: 7 (vote up)
>> #384734
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I have come today to present my first drawing done with technology, instead of paper. As well as my first ever piece on the Hub! That being said, sorry if I messed up with the tags, or if the quality isn't too great.
I would love to hear some feedback if you have any!
>> #384741
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>> #384785
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I would add a few more stages of undress. Like a slide of the skirt being at the ankles before it disappears. If you're attached to the instantaneous disappearance of cloths, maybe ad an effect to show that they are magicked away. It would make the piece feel way more diegetic.
Next, I would like to see more of a difference between tranced and not-tranced. Blank eyes and slacked jaw are a good start, but maybe a more relaxed posture, tilted head, more opened or closed eyes, and a bit of drool might convey the trancing better.
As for praise, I do love your character's design. She has a nice color pallet I usually prefer longer her but the shorter hair fits. I would love to see more of her and different interpretations from different artists. Especially if they give her more character.
Other than that this is really good. Especially for a first piece and for it's trying to be. My biggest feedback would simply be, keep going. You're naturally going to improve over time and if this is the baseline, I can't wait to see what improvement looks like.