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  • Id: 10841
  • Posted: 2013-11-22 20:09:45
    by EdgeOfTheMoon
  • Size: 850x1268
  • Rating: Explicit
  • Score: 119 (vote up)
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Ayvuir
>> #5013
Posted on 2013-11-22 20:48:19
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I feel the profanity usage here doesn't quite match the appearance of the character. Probably just a personal preference.
Vanndril
>> #5014
Posted on 2013-11-22 20:52:38
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Ayvuir said:
I feel the profanity usage here doesn't quite match the appearance of the character. Probably just a personal preference.


I have to agree. Honestly, it just needs to be toned down to match the image better. Remove one or two of the "fuck"s, that one "damn" in the first part, and replace the remaining "fuck"s in her dialogue with hell, and suddenly it seems much more "in character" to her design. Funny I can say that, since she doesn't really have any character to begin with.

On a less subjective note, a question is ended with a period, here. :P
Mindwipe
>> #5018
Posted on 2013-11-22 21:22:25
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This sequence needs a pool. Got any preferences for a title?
EdgeOfTheMoon
>> #5028
Posted on 2013-11-23 00:46:27
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Hmm. I can definitely see what people mean about the swearing, I tend to write the text separate from the maniping so I guess I ended with some dissonance here.

Oh heck I'm terrible at titles. "Mantra Machine"
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