black_hair blush breast_press breasts brown_eyes brown_hair comic countdown dazed defeated drool eljimadooor female_only femdom femsub girls_und_panzer kinuyo_nishi limp long_hair lying miho_nishizumi petting school_uniform shin_kawasaki short_hair skirt text translated uniform yuri

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Whisper
>> #412240
Posted on 2021-03-26 20:30:17
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Ah yes I was planning to upload that, but never did
Time to beg translators to work their magic!

Sir_Lurksalaot
>> #412248
Posted on 2021-03-26 21:54:14
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Whisper said:
Time to beg translators to work their magic!

An attempt was made

ShadowWarlock
>> #412270
Posted on 2021-03-27 01:21:16
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Hesitant to change the translation based on my limited JP, but the source tweet indicates that Miho is hypnotizing Nishi before a Senshado match to guarantee that Nishi will lose. So despite the good effort to use natural english words instead of something more literal, I think you need to use some variant of "win" or "lose" here, especially on the major suggestion in purple on the left.

Also, for the record this artist has two femdom-femsub-futanari garupan hypnosis doujins you can buy at the DLsite link in their Twitter profile which are in JP but have more focus on detail in the induction/suggestion part if you can read it.

Sir_Lurksalaot
>> #412271
Posted on 2021-03-27 01:25:06
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ShadowWarlock said:
Hesitant to change the translation based on my limited JP, but the source tweet indicates that Miho is hypnotizing Nishi before a Senshado match to guarantee that Nishi will lose. So despite the good effort to use natural english words instead of something more literal, I think you need to use some variant of "win" or "lose" here, especially on the major suggestion in purple on the left.

Feel free to update. I'm not a cop.

ShadowWarlock
>> #412280
Posted on 2021-03-27 02:33:02
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Oops, spent to long thinking about it lol. Anyway, I liked your sense of induction which was why I was hesitant to adjust, I've never really wrote it myself and most of the examples I'm used to in this genre tend to be overly literal. I like this flow from the suggestion into the "can't" mutter now too.

pokemongirl
>> #412300
Posted on 2021-03-27 03:46:18
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YES~~~

Mattlau04
>> #413485
Posted on 2021-04-03 17:38:23
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YES YES YES YES!!!

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