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asdingo
>> #10586
Posted on 2014-02-17 23:26:07
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My first try at anything manip / mind control related... plus first time posting aswell :e If anything would need changing please do inform me. Hope you enjoy !
scp-682
>> #10603
Posted on 2014-02-18 06:52:40
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Good basis, or, plot I suppose. However I feel its a bit rushed, not in a sense that you rushed it but a sense that the story goes from point A to B too quickly. I feel there should be more detail, however that's just one hypno-fan's opinion. perhaps something showing why she's coming in the pic? Something that directly leads to the picture. Again, your manip, not mine. Nice pic.
asdingo
>> #10625
Posted on 2014-02-18 15:24:36
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I have to agree with you actually, but I felt that I felt like I already had too much text on the picture, so I didnt change much more, but I will take it into consideration next time, thanks :e
Ridley
>> #15693
Posted on 2014-04-20 09:27:43
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dingo, welcome to the hub!

I don't find it to be RUSHED, but if you could find a way to flesh out your plot then you'd be one of our best writers cause goddamn you're spinning golden fuckin silk here bruh look at you go you are on FIRE

so yeah, you're hitting 9/10 here bud, just gotta elaborate on character interaction a bit more!

once again , welcome! enjoy your stay.

asaola
>> #104215
Posted on 2016-05-16 08:38:46
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You know, I enjoyed this a lot, it did feel rushed in a way, but being honest it was your first time so there's no need to worry, wish you did more
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