Posted on 2014-07-29 10:10:01
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Well, here is my first manip so feedback and recommendations on how to improve would be greatly appreciated.

Posted on 2014-07-29 10:28:33
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Do this count as groping?

Posted on 2014-07-29 10:32:47
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The little story you gave it is fair enough, and the grammar is better than many.

I think the biggest aspects you could improve on are all aesthetics of text placement and font.

To start, the text colors are a tad too light for that white background. This makes them blend too well and makes the text hard to read. The pink is especially harsh on the eyes, while the orange-ish color just needs to be a little darker. As a general rule of thumb: dark backgrounds get light colored font, and light backgrounds get darker colored font. Readability and avoiding eye-straining color combinations are two big keys to caption aesthetics.

In this case, since the original image's background is a plain white, using white as the background to your text area is fine, but, as general advice, when the background of an image isn't plain white/black, avoid using white/black for backgrounds. It's usually best to use an off-white or dark gray over a bright white or pitch black. I just wanted to mention that while we were on the topic of colors.

Another thing I noticed is that your font colors seem to be random. What I mean is that the colors of the text don't visually correspond with either character in any real way. While, with only two characters involved this is usually alright, it can become confusing if a third or fourth character is involved. In general, it's a good idea for the colors you choose for the lines of text to somehow correspond to the character that's speaking. Maybe it's their hair color, or maybe their eye color. Something like that.

Then there's text placement. Where you started off in the center, it was good. But then your lines of text started shifting toward the left. You want to make sure the lines are all on the same X axis. Consistency of design is important to aesthetics.

Now, I also notice that you chose a very basic font for the text. This is fine, but don't be afraid to try and experiment with other fonts. Different font styles have been known to make big impacts on how a reader feels about what they read. Different fonts can completely change a reader's reactions to a text. When choosing a font, just make sure it's readable and looks good. And avoid commonly hated fonts, such as Comic Sans.

That's about all the criticism I can think to give, atm. All in all, a good first attempt at a caption_only manip.

Oh, and you missed the coloring of the first quotation mark. :P

Just letting you know.

Posted on 2014-07-29 10:34:14
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I'd think so.

Posted on 2014-07-29 13:38:38
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Except...wasn't it said in canon that she WOULDN'T fade out of existence? And besides, it's been shown that Namine's powers AREN'T that strong. When she "destroyed" Repliku's Memories, he snapped back, so she doesn't have completely control. Likewise, while she was able to completely remove Kairi from Sora's memories he was still able to realize something was wrong, and even before she repaired his memory he was able to recall who Kairi was.

Long story short, OOC bothers me.

Posted on 2014-07-29 20:37:03
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Alright, let me explain myself a bit here. For the longest time since Re Chain of Memories I've had this nagging thought in the back of my head about if Namine had chosen to go through with the complete memory manipulation. Remember the only reason Sora started to get a glimpse of Kairi is due to Namine interfering due to immense guilt. If she had completely followed through with her own desires, truly becoming a witch of memories, this route is easily one that could happen.

So long story short, gotta love Alternate Universe ideas.

Posted on 2014-07-30 02:49:58
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I would also ad it's weird to have all that empty space below the text.
When you upload a manip, make sure to add caption_only if the source image is unedited non-mc; manips like this can bother some people who prefer to focus on pictures over text, so caption_only lets them blacklist it.

Posted on 2014-07-30 12:33:20
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Except...those weren't her desires. Marluxia realized her powers and used her as a tool. She only refers to herself as a "Witch" because thats what others called her. Remember this line from KH2?

"I'm a Witch. That's what DiZ calls me"

Posted on 2022-10-31 03:59:19
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It would be so easy for Namine to conquer the universe, especially after Re:MIND when Sora connected to literally everything all at once, so Namine's power's only restriction means nothing anymore