Ok, the remake is complete, I hope you like it, now its a bit easier to read, understand, and yes, the font is still small, I forgot to increase it before hitting save.
Well, this one is better, but you should still try to use a better font - Anime Ace or Wild Words for example. I would have also taken the color at the top and the bottom and made a gradient, but at least it isn't that hard of a cut anymore.
You should also work with layers, instead of just coloring the same layer as the font (which leaves several areas white where you missed it.
I'd for one advise to have someone revise/proofread your writing. Not horrible in any way, but could definitely use some refining to help improve it. And if you're wondering what exactly I'm talking about, there are grammatical errors, typos, etc. that should be easily avoided...
RedCollarBlackCollar said: I'd for one advise to have someone revise/proofread your writing. Not horrible in any way, but could definitely use some refining to help improve it. And if you're wondering what exactly I'm talking about, there are grammatical errors, typos, etc. that should be easily avoided...
I second this. You're conceptualising is fine; however, you are lacking the "finesse" for grammar. As the person before me said, you ought to have someone proofread your stuff before making the permanent version of the image. I'd write the story first on word or notepad etc.
Nice! Still a little rough in parts (already covered by those above), but as someone who's draws more enjoyment from story than image, I can say I am thankful for the fixes. I like that the story seems a little more... personable? now, as well.
General question mostly on topic: I'm sure this has been asked and answered dozens of times previously, but is there somewhere on the site dedicated to asking for/offering to proofread? I would have thought forums, but there appear to only be a small number of threads related to individuals asking for help.
General question mostly on topic: I'm sure this has been asked and answered dozens of times previously, but is there somewhere on the site dedicated to asking for/offering to proofread? I would have thought forums, but there appear to only be a small number of threads related to individuals asking for help.
now that's what I need.
Thank you all for all of the feedback, its been really helpful so far. I'll get it right eventually.
Im always open to proofread people's stuff. If you're curious on how to contact me, use the site's mailing system and I'll give you more info there. Or if I'm online on the IRC you can reach me by Whoising TradeJack and finding me under any of my aliases.
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You should also work with layers, instead of just coloring the same layer as the font (which leaves several areas white where you missed it.
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I'd for one advise to have someone revise/proofread your writing. Not horrible in any way, but could definitely use some refining to help improve it. And if you're wondering what exactly I'm talking about, there are grammatical errors, typos, etc. that should be easily avoided...
I second this. You're conceptualising is fine; however, you are lacking the "finesse" for grammar. As the person before me said, you ought to have someone proofread your stuff before making the permanent version of the image. I'd write the story first on word or notepad etc.
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General question mostly on topic: I'm sure this has been asked and answered dozens of times previously, but is there somewhere on the site dedicated to asking for/offering to proofread? I would have thought forums, but there appear to only be a small number of threads related to individuals asking for help.
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now that's what I need.
Thank you all for all of the feedback, its been really helpful so far. I'll get it right eventually.
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