Posted on 2016-11-25 19:30:24
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Hey all, still trying to improve based on some feedback I've received, particularly when it comes to shading... Be sure to let me know what you think!

Posted on 2016-11-25 21:48:03
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Is this at all based on slayer40k's stories on deviantart? slayer40k.deviantart.com/...eover-Chapter-1-553278955

Posted on 2016-11-25 22:12:54
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I believe so. I was commissioned to draw this based on an excerpt the customer shared with me, but I never dug into it much further than that.

Posted on 2016-11-25 22:57:50
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Feedback time! Some points to address:
>Jesse's feet I'm instantly having two different issues with. Her right foot should reveal her sole a bit as it rests on Ashley's face, but instead gives off the impression that we're seeing only the side of the foot, making it too unnaturally thick. As for her left foot, my mind's having trouble processing what's not being shown between Ashley's legs vs what we can see with Jesse's left leg. I keep seeing it as if her foot's a bit too far in/deep due to the leg and foot not quite connecting, but instead, the foot just looks like it's part of the leg overall.
>As far as colors go, the red blush on Ashley's face could use a bit more subtlety, or at least build up around the edges. I do see it as blush at least, but I think having that a built up foundation would help make it appear a bit more natural.
>Ashely's waist is too elongated.
>The chair needs some perspective done to it (and the handcuffs), like that of the floor; otherwise, it just feels so out of place in the pic as this flat object Jesse's sorta sitting on. That, and trying to give it a bit of texture (marble perhaps) wouldn't hurt. Which I'm aware can be tedious, but I do think could be a nice touch. Working off reference images for coloring's what I'd suggest to help in that instance.
>Jesse's hair could use a bit of shading like how Ashely's got some. Nothing major, but just a bit at least.
>>The one thing I do wish to see more of would be some highlights, other than just the hair. Sure, it does't have to be a bright room, but it would definitely be worth it as to help boost/contrast your shading more (before I forget, inside Ashley's mouth could even have drop of shading). Along with that, would help in making your objects a bit more 3-dimensional, especially for the black clothing which I'd highly suggest trying out.
>Last pointer as to continue about the shading would be like the blush, you need to try and vary it further. Mainly with the floor under Ashley, it could use some more buildup as for where she's sitting, and as the shadow goes further out from that point, it gets much lighter. Also, try not to think of shadows as certain parts that are just a bit darker with the addition of black or gray; darker colors are what you need to help, specifically as to boost contrast + your color schemes you got going.

Hope some of it helps BlackWave!

Posted on 2016-11-26 00:47:21
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yes it is and i also commissioned the story

Posted on 2016-11-26 07:07:08
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Very lovely...and those Joy eyes *drools*

Posted on 2016-11-26 11:07:12
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actually joy isn't in the picture it's ashley after her change got completed

Posted on 2016-11-26 21:04:07
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added zombie walk cuz of her arms.

Posted on 2016-12-14 22:31:11
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Sorry I never replied to this, but I did read it! It's much appreciated, too, thank you~.

Posted on 2016-12-14 22:33:48
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It'd occurred to me, but I figured I'd leave it out since... you know, no walking. I'm happy to have it there, though, zombie walk is one of my favorites~. =D