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Sky
>> #251503
Posted on 2018-05-12 13:39:42
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Fixed the spelling mistakes
bugmenot
>> #251506
Posted on 2018-05-12 13:43:43
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The clipboard should say "Obey your mistress.", not "Obey yours mistress.".
Sky
>> #251509
Posted on 2018-05-12 14:03:11
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bugmenot said:
The clipboard should say "Obey your mistress.", not "Obey yours mistress.".


Your gonna nitpick that small detail?
Rotem_Dishon
>> #251515
Posted on 2018-05-12 15:01:27
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Sky said:
Your gonna nitpick that small detail?


You're right. If we're going to pick on that, we might as well mention the instances of poor grammar ("There's management open", "give into to mistress"), the compressed text (I forget the actual word it. my apologies) without any good reason for it, and the way the text's outline isn't applied in the space inside the lower case 'g's, which irritates my eyes every time I see it.

When you're making the effort and fixing mistakes, take your time and really look for other things you might have missed or that you can improve since you've already got the thing open anyway. The overall work would usually end up being better for it.
Whisper
>> #251516
Posted on 2018-05-12 15:46:26
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Rotem_Dishon said:
You're right. If we're going to pick on that, we might as well mention the instances of poor grammar ("There's management open", "give into to mistress"), the compressed text (I forget the actual word it. my apologies) without any good reason for it, and the way the text's outline isn't applied in the space inside the lower case 'g's, which irritates my eyes every time I see it.

When you're making the effort and fixing mistakes, take your time and really look for other things you might have missed or that you can improve since you've already got the thing open anyway. The overall work would usually end up being better for it.


I agree with Rotem, especially cause this could be a really great piece. Also you could have written a little more given the space you have left. It would have been great to have the commander resist or fall under a bit longer.
This is positive criticism and I hope your next piece will be even better.
Sky
>> #251517
Posted on 2018-05-12 15:49:27
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Whisper said:
I agree with Rotem, especially cause this could be a really great piece. Also you could have written a little more given the space you have left. It would have been great to have the commander resist or fall under a bit longer.
This is positive criticism and I hope your next piece will be even better.



So should i recreate thid piece and fix the gramma and make the text longer
chocobosage85
>> #251555
Posted on 2018-05-12 20:46:28
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Sky said:
So should i recreate thid piece and fix the gramma and make the text longer


IMO... If you have the care/concern to do so, sure why not revise it. I was able to look past its faults and still enjoy it (though they were distracting for sure), but it it bothers you... nothing is preventing you from improving it.

All that said, even if you choose not to update it... Just take everyone's critism constructively and remember it for your next piece (along with what Rotem said about corrections, take your time, particularly then).
Sky
>> #251556
Posted on 2018-05-12 20:55:28
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chocobosage85 said:
IMO... If you have the care/concern to do so, sure why not revise it. I was able to look past its faults and still enjoy it (though they were distracting for sure), but it it bothers you... nothing is preventing you from improving it.

All that said, even if you choose not to update it... Just take everyone's critism constructively and remember it for your next piece (along with what Rotem said about corrections, take your time, particularly then).


I just dont have great grammar
chocobosage85
>> #251565
Posted on 2018-05-12 22:10:59
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Sky said:
I just dont have great grammar


You could ask someone to proof read your caption text, I know some people would be happy to do that for you.
Sky
>> #251566
Posted on 2018-05-12 22:34:20
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chocobosage85 said:
You could ask someone to proof read your caption text, I know some people would be happy to do that for you.


Would this be on discord?
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