Search

(Supports wildcard *)
Statistics
Options
History
Related Posts
ahri alternate_hair_color animal_ears bottomless breasts caption cum femsub fox_girl glowing glowing_eyes heterosexual kitsune_girl league_of_legends manip nude open_mouth penis pubic_hair ricegnat selfie tail tech_control text tobikohai_(manipper) topless

Edit | Respond

9 comments (0 hidden)

TobiKohai
>> #277705
Posted on 2018-08-26 03:26:59
Score: 0 (vote Up)
Another small little edit and caption that I completed for my new Tumblr! Be careful what apps you download these days, it may be the new and trendy thing, but some people get a little too carried away just for their latest avatar accessory...

Want to see more of my stuff, released early and with all other sort of content? Check out my Tumblr!
meltingmindsshiftingbodies.tumblr.com/
EoD
>> #277748
Posted on 2018-08-26 12:09:49
Score: 0 (vote Up)
I'm just gonna say the writing on this isn't super good. It's really generically bad "Men can't write women"
TobiKohai
>> #277755
Posted on 2018-08-26 13:41:53
Score: 1 (vote Up)
EoD said:
I'm just gonna say the writing on this isn't super good. It's really generically bad "Men can't write women"


I'm sorry if it doesn't meet your standards, and I'm always looking to improve. Do you think you could give any hints about where exactly it really fell off for you or where to improve on? Kinda hard to know where to focus when I'm just told its all generically bad!
anonplsno
>> #277854
Posted on 2018-08-27 01:06:11
Score: 1 (vote Up)
I enjoyed the story a lot, thanks for the upload <3

EoD
>> #277864
Posted on 2018-08-27 01:47:45
Score: 0 (vote Up)
TobiKohai said:
I'm sorry if it doesn't meet your standards, and I'm always looking to improve. Do you think you could give any hints about where exactly it really fell off for you or where to improve on? Kinda hard to know where to focus when I'm just told its all generically bad!


It's written like someone who has a vague idea of what sexy means, and what words are considered sexy, but who just mashed them together, while also trying to sound sophisticated. "Puffy sex" just sounds...uncomfortable for example
TobiKohai
>> #277878
Posted on 2018-08-27 03:39:24
Score: 0 (vote Up)
EoD said:
It's written like someone who has a vague idea of what sexy means, and what words are considered sexy, but who just mashed them together, while also trying to sound sophisticated. "Puffy sex" just sounds...uncomfortable for example


Mhmm! Ok then, I'll try and focus more on those aspects. I'll admit in this one perhaps I focused a bit too much on the story rather than too heavily on the sexy, smutty parts of it, which means that they may have been rushed and like you said, give an idea of "I think I'm being sexy" rather than actually being sexy. Thanks for the advice! I'll try and improve on that for next time and pick my words better ^^
hypnotoad
>> #277923
Posted on 2018-08-27 09:08:56
Score: 0 (vote Up)
Some spellchecking would probably help too. Panties can be a sexy word. Panites, not so much.
kiatight
>> #278066
Posted on 2018-08-28 20:25:44
Score: 0 (vote Up)
Despite the criticisms, I really love this one.
Yeeter214
>> #401738
Posted on 2021-01-09 21:27:38
Score: 1 (vote Up)
EoD said:
I'm just gonna say the writing on this isn't super good. It's really generically bad "Men can't write women"


Wow. That's sexism, folks. We frown upon that. Why is everyone against us (men) now?
1