Posted on 2019-01-03 06:46:36
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Second attempt at uploading this. First attempt was really hard to read. Hope this is better. This is my second-ever attempt at writing a caption, so I happily welcome feedback. Truth be told, I had more space than anticipated, so added a couple things different from my original rough draft. Hope you all like it!

Posted on 2019-01-03 07:00:34
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This is a lot easier to read. And the writing is fantastic!

Posted on 2019-01-03 07:16:48
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aye aye like the changes.
and if you have more space than you think you did, that's a sign that this isn't too long of a manip.
Really good work can't wait to see more from you.

Posted on 2019-01-03 09:43:55
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I really like this one!
I can't remember if it was in the first version, but I've noticed now that you've got a "teell" at the end there ^^'
EDIT: Oh, and "tapped" instead of "trapped" at the start of the second-last paragraph

Posted on 2019-01-03 15:08:04
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Ah, damn! I was typing up the second version kind of quickly. Guess that’s what I get for not proofreading well enough! Glad you like it regardless!

Posted on 2019-01-03 19:42:50
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Thank you so much! Glad this edit is easier on the eyes.

Posted on 2019-01-04 00:52:40
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Still questionable but all the power to you. There isn't really an age per se so I'd say your fantasy works

Posted on 2019-01-04 03:33:24
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Really nice! Great work!

Posted on 2019-01-05 03:03:44
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doesn't this call for a brain drain tag?

Posted on 2019-01-05 05:15:13
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Didn’t even know that was a tag, but I just added it!