There are quite a lot of typos and errors (dawned - > donned | the amours -> the armour's | programing - > programming | grabbing - > grabbing... And others I've probably forgotten)
Almost all "there" in the text should be "their".
There are randoms capitalized letters at the start of certain words that shouldn't be that way.
It feels like it could benefit from syntax reworks in some places, since it can lead to confusing sentences (for instance, the first one : should I read "Linkle swayed thoughtlessly, an empty husk" or "Linkle swayed, thoughtless, an empty husk")
Also, formatting : in the first paragraph, why is "You are a sex toy" not in italics, like the other suggestions?
AnnoyinGoblin said: There are quite a lot of typos and errors (dawned - > donned | the amours -> the armour's | programing - > programming | grabbing - > grabbing... And others I've probably forgotten)
Almost all "there" in the text should be "their".
There are randoms capitalized letters at the start of certain words that shouldn't be that way.
It feels like it could benefit from syntax reworks in some places, since it can lead to confusing sentences (for instance, the first one : should I read "Linkle swayed thoughtlessly, an empty husk" or "Linkle swayed, thoughtless, an empty husk")
Also, formatting : in the first paragraph, why is "You are a sex toy" not in italics, like the other suggestions?
I like the glitchy appearance of the text though.
First of thanks for the aid in errors in my writing
simply put I had not noticed these before uploading and also thought it read fine.
the random/misplaced capitals are me being a bit of a derp
and the lack of italics on the last bit of the second paragraph completely unintentional.
However, I do appreciate the feedback and may fix up some of the errors and reupload
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Hopefully, this doesn't post twice
>> #358050
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Almost all "there" in the text should be "their".
There are randoms capitalized letters at the start of certain words that shouldn't be that way.
It feels like it could benefit from syntax reworks in some places, since it can lead to confusing sentences (for instance, the first one : should I read "Linkle swayed thoughtlessly, an empty husk" or "Linkle swayed, thoughtless, an empty husk")
Also, formatting : in the first paragraph, why is "You are a sex toy" not in italics, like the other suggestions?
I like the glitchy appearance of the text though.
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There are quite a lot of typos and errors (dawned - > donned | the amours -> the armour's | programing - > programming | grabbing - > grabbing... And others I've probably forgotten)
Almost all "there" in the text should be "their".
There are randoms capitalized letters at the start of certain words that shouldn't be that way.
It feels like it could benefit from syntax reworks in some places, since it can lead to confusing sentences (for instance, the first one : should I read "Linkle swayed thoughtlessly, an empty husk" or "Linkle swayed, thoughtless, an empty husk")
Also, formatting : in the first paragraph, why is "You are a sex toy" not in italics, like the other suggestions?
I like the glitchy appearance of the text though.
First of thanks for the aid in errors in my writing
simply put I had not noticed these before uploading and also thought it read fine.
the random/misplaced capitals are me being a bit of a derp
and the lack of italics on the last bit of the second paragraph completely unintentional.
However, I do appreciate the feedback and may fix up some of the errors and reupload
thanks again for pointing out errors
Dapper Shark
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>> #358084
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This isn't Linkle. It's Rule 63 Link. Linkle and Link are different characters.
Sorry to burst your bubble friend but that's the linkle mod...
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Sorry to burst your bubble friend but that's the linkle mod...
In that case, remove the Link tag.