Proofreaders
Hey so im looking for some people to proofread me stuff before i post them. Is anyone interested in doing this?
I could
i'll help out
Proof read 1# imgur.com/a/WqusPix
So just going to ask that rather than post everything you make here for proof reading that you use the DMs to do it.
Imasuky said:
So just going to ask that rather than post everything you make here for proof reading that you use the DMs to do it.
So just going to ask that rather than post everything you make here for proof reading that you use the DMs to do it.
O you mean the mails? Idk completely forgot this site had that
1) because of the lack of capitalization and the the placement of the word, as well as the fact that it works on it's own, the "i am good, i hope all is good with you" is a bit confusing; I suggest either moving the i to the 2nd line, adding in a comma, or dropping the 2nd "I" entirely, as "hope all is good with you" stands on it's own
you might also make hello into "hai" to make it netspeakish, but that would be a purposeful misspelling
2) you're missing the d in obedient
3) while it's a hot pic, was she naked and masturbating before D.VA hypnotized her? cause D.va never said "masturbate and send me a pic", so I found it peculiar
4) I'm not sure what is meant by the term "noob cum" ... perhaps you meant it as a pronoun, like "when you cum, noob, you will be my slave", or did you mean it as an insulting descriptor, like "when you cum like a noob you will be my slave forever"?
Lots of people have already jumped on this, but could this be a thread like the <<hypnohub.net/forum/show/34379|Art general crit/feedback/help>> thread? I'd love to see more people be aware of this being an option! And like that thread I'll be sure to keep an eye on this one too :D
Friye said:
Lots of people have already jumped on this, but could this be a thread like the <<hypnohub.net/forum/show/34379|Art general crit/feedback/help>> thread? I'd love to see more people be aware of this being an option! And like that thread I'll be sure to keep an eye on this one too :D
Lots of people have already jumped on this, but could this be a thread like the <<hypnohub.net/forum/show/34379|Art general crit/feedback/help>> thread? I'd love to see more people be aware of this being an option! And like that thread I'll be sure to keep an eye on this one too :D
Ive heard of it and i just decided to make my own so i didn't need to go through everyone elses
Grim said:
1) because of the lack of capitalization and the the placement of the word, as well as the fact that it works on it's own, the "i am good, i hope all is good with you" is a bit confusing; I suggest either moving the i to the 2nd line, adding in a comma, or dropping the 2nd "I" entirely, as "hope all is good with you" stands on it's own
you might also make hello into "hai" to make it netspeakish, but that would be a purposeful misspelling
2) you're missing the d in obedient
3) while it's a hot pic, was she naked and masturbating before D.VA hypnotized her? cause D.va never said "masturbate and send me a pic", so I found it peculiar
4) I'm not sure what is meant by the term "noob cum" ... perhaps you meant it as a pronoun, like "when you cum, noob, you will be my slave", or did you mean it as an insulting descriptor, like "when you cum like a noob you will be my slave forever"?
1) because of the lack of capitalization and the the placement of the word, as well as the fact that it works on it's own, the "i am good, i hope all is good with you" is a bit confusing; I suggest either moving the i to the 2nd line, adding in a comma, or dropping the 2nd "I" entirely, as "hope all is good with you" stands on it's own
you might also make hello into "hai" to make it netspeakish, but that would be a purposeful misspelling
2) you're missing the d in obedient
3) while it's a hot pic, was she naked and masturbating before D.VA hypnotized her? cause D.va never said "masturbate and send me a pic", so I found it peculiar
4) I'm not sure what is meant by the term "noob cum" ... perhaps you meant it as a pronoun, like "when you cum, noob, you will be my slave", or did you mean it as an insulting descriptor, like "when you cum like a noob you will be my slave forever"?
Ok thanks i made mei say it like that because shes not great at english you know?
Grim said:
1) because of the lack of capitalization and the the placement of the word, as well as the fact that it works on it's own, the "i am good, i hope all is good with you" is a bit confusing; I suggest either moving the i to the 2nd line, adding in a comma, or dropping the 2nd "I" entirely, as "hope all is good with you" stands on it's own
you might also make hello into "hai" to make it netspeakish, but that would be a purposeful misspelling
2) you're missing the d in obedient
3) while it's a hot pic, was she naked and masturbating before D.VA hypnotized her? cause D.va never said "masturbate and send me a pic", so I found it peculiar
Again imgur.com/a/fnwF5bh
4) I'm not sure what is meant by the term "noob cum" ... perhaps you meant it as a pronoun, like "when you cum, noob, you will be my slave", or did you mean it as an insulting descriptor, like "when you cum like a noob you will be my slave forever"?
1) because of the lack of capitalization and the the placement of the word, as well as the fact that it works on it's own, the "i am good, i hope all is good with you" is a bit confusing; I suggest either moving the i to the 2nd line, adding in a comma, or dropping the 2nd "I" entirely, as "hope all is good with you" stands on it's own
you might also make hello into "hai" to make it netspeakish, but that would be a purposeful misspelling
2) you're missing the d in obedient
3) while it's a hot pic, was she naked and masturbating before D.VA hypnotized her? cause D.va never said "masturbate and send me a pic", so I found it peculiar
Again imgur.com/a/fnwF5bh
4) I'm not sure what is meant by the term "noob cum" ... perhaps you meant it as a pronoun, like "when you cum, noob, you will be my slave", or did you mean it as an insulting descriptor, like "when you cum like a noob you will be my slave forever"?
Took the notes and again it was flaged
The Art general crit/feedback/help thread is there for a reason. Use it.
And stop posting things until they pass use the thread and only when you are told that it is good enough there should you post oon the hub proper.
This is a near unanimous descion by the mod team.
I am locking this thread now and if you start another rather than using the proper thread we may take action.
And stop posting things until they pass use the thread and only when you are told that it is good enough there should you post oon the hub proper.
This is a near unanimous descion by the mod team.
I am locking this thread now and if you start another rather than using the proper thread we may take action.
